Liberated

[Sallad]

Wearing your cuffs
I feel liberated

Though you rein me
I am in control

Bound and beaten
For all I am worth,
Yet I alone can say "when".

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Written as kind of a spur of the moment thing... Please let me know what you think

 

[bogusbrig]

Wearing your cuffs
I feel liberated

Though you rein me
I am in control

Bound and beaten
For all I am worth,
Yet I alone can say "when".

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Written as kind of a spur of the moment thing... Please let me know what you think

You think
you're in control
He wants you
to think you are

But he knows
you'll consent
To anything he asks

And if you don't
You're in his cuffs
and he has the key

 

[WickedEve]

not bad, but...

When I read your poem, it's like "Another sub feels liberated and in control." And that's fine. But don't tell me that wearing cuffs make you feel liberated. Show me. Let me discover that liberation through your words, through your cliché-free descriptions of your own personal experiences. If you can do that, you'll have a better poem.
You're off to a good start. Keeping going!