Let me know what you think.

[CND]

I've posted a few stories already, and I have more stories on the drawing board, but I wouldn't mind hearing more from readers to hear what you all think about my work.

I find inspiration to write in the people I meet, so I can't really say my work falls into the same category. With this in mind, I know for a fact that everyone won't like my stories, and hardly anyone will like them all. However, they all mean something to me, as I explored something new on my journey through the mists of imagination.

Feel free to comment on anything you see. As a writer, and a human being, I'm excepting that people will tell me things that are both good and bad. So instead of individual story links, here is the link to my page which of course lists all my stories.

Looking forward to sharing and receiving more knowledge.

http://www.literotica.com/stories/memberpage.php?uid=85187

 

[Impetus]

Park Life feedback:

I'll start out with some mundane technical feedback, provided through example:

Some would call (her) a slut, but she knew better than that. (She had become) an erupting volcano(. Her) desire for sex had always been there, (but) it had just reached a point where the pressure had become to(o) high. It had come to her in a dream, (the realization) that she wasn't getting enough attention or the sex that she rightfully deserved. In that moment, being a woman of class that craved excitement(,) she had made the spontaneous decision to change (everything). She was going to have all that she had been missing out on over the years, and she was going to enjoy it fully (and) take it anywhere she could.

Next, the mood of the whole piece:

I actually had lots of fun reading about this woman plying sexual trade to get whatever the heck she wanted, regardless of what anyone else wanted. At times it was actually kind of funny what she was getting away with, and the fact that she was using sex everywhere meant that you kept the sexual tension high for the entire story, peaking it at the end with the (nicely hot) threesome.

I thought the intro was a little abrupt, but then again, so was her sexual revalation. I would have expounded a little more on the transition, if it's such a sweeping change in her personality it might pay to give it more attention, and talk a bit more about how she was before the change. Of course, I am a sucker for a good story, so take that suggestion however you like.

Overall impressions: a really fun story to read, good work, good sex, and good writing.

-I

 

[CND]

Stunned

Perhaps the word that best describes it is stunned? Many men have fantasies similar to this, and if it would happen, they most likely would stand stunned for a while.