Hi all,
I'm after some advice on form for a trilogy I'm working on. They are all based on my sexual fantasies about my friend: the two people in them are real, my feelings are real, but the content is fiction.
The first part 'Falling' - which I wrote and submitted in August - received a comment which criticised the form, saying it was more like a letter to my lover than a story and therefore lacked context / situation which they felt made the sexual descriptions lack eroticism.
I've since gone back through and reworked some sections to address this but the letter-style form is still the same. I feel I want to continue in this style as the anonymous commenter is right - my writing is really for this amazing woman who turns me on in every way - but I'm now questioning this decision as, after all, I'm publishing them here rather than showing them to her!
Should I be turning them into more conventional fictional stories? Or describing the sexual content differently? Or sticking with my original idea and continuing in the same way?
Any advice / suggestions here and/or comments on 'Falling' in the section below my 'story' would be super helpful.
Link to 'Falling':
https://www.literotica.com/s/falling-36
Thanks!
I'm after some advice on form for a trilogy I'm working on. They are all based on my sexual fantasies about my friend: the two people in them are real, my feelings are real, but the content is fiction.
The first part 'Falling' - which I wrote and submitted in August - received a comment which criticised the form, saying it was more like a letter to my lover than a story and therefore lacked context / situation which they felt made the sexual descriptions lack eroticism.
I've since gone back through and reworked some sections to address this but the letter-style form is still the same. I feel I want to continue in this style as the anonymous commenter is right - my writing is really for this amazing woman who turns me on in every way - but I'm now questioning this decision as, after all, I'm publishing them here rather than showing them to her!
Should I be turning them into more conventional fictional stories? Or describing the sexual content differently? Or sticking with my original idea and continuing in the same way?
Any advice / suggestions here and/or comments on 'Falling' in the section below my 'story' would be super helpful.
Link to 'Falling':
https://www.literotica.com/s/falling-36
Thanks!