Ladies, if you read "Kelly's New Man"

Softouch911

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I have some questions for you on this, my first Lit. story. (Link is in the sig.) I'm pleased with the reaction to the story so far, but the comments don't give me a lot of info (of course), Sooooo:

A) I used Kelly's pov -- yeah, I know speaking from a woman's pov is a bit of a reach. How did I do? Did I say anything for her or about her that is really "stupid." :rolleyes:

B) Several sex scenes, again from her pov. And the perennial guy question: "Was it good for you?" Is it arousing?

C) Are the characters believable? Any big slipups?

D) The point/plot of the story is the change Kelly and John make in their relationship. Do you think they change?

Thanks! Softie -- shuffling feet anxiously in corner :eek:
 
I don't have time to read the whole thing now (it's long!), but I'll read it later. I liked what I read so far, though. It didn't feel like a man was writing it. I'll give you some better feedback after I read all of it.

SJ
 
Ok-You did a pretty good job of the woman's POV. The only time I'm not sure if I was completely with you was the final sex scene. But then all women are different and just because I didn't relate doesn't mean that others won't. My biggest issues were the reference to hitting her cervix (which isn't always that pleasant) and feeling his cum inside her. I have never felt cum inside me. I can feel a man's penis pulse inside me, but that's it. That's just me though.

Yes, I think they would change. Definitely from Kelly's pov- she liked the change in their relationship. I don't think there was ever a clear answer of why he changed though (unless I missed it).

Overall, I would say it was very arousing - I enjoyed it. :)

SJ
 
sophia jane said:
Ok-You did a pretty good job of the woman's POV. The only time I'm not sure if I was completely with you was the final sex scene. But then all women are different and just because I didn't relate doesn't mean that others won't. My biggest issues were the reference to hitting her cervix (which isn't always that pleasant) and feeling his cum inside her. I have never felt cum inside me. I can feel a man's penis pulse inside me, but that's it. That's just me though.

Yes, I think they would change. Definitely from Kelly's pov- she liked the change in their relationship. I don't think there was ever a clear answer of why he changed though (unless I missed it).

Overall, I would say it was very arousing - I enjoyed it. :)

SJ

Thank you very much, SJ!

These, among others, were specific questions I had. As I wrote it I asked three of my (female) friends about touching the cervix and about feeling the cum. They agreed with you that, under ordinary circumstances, contact with the cervix is -- one said -- painful. I got the idea for the scene from one of my friends, though, who claimed that once upon a time she had been so very turned on that it didn't bother her.

Two of them claimed that they could feel sperm in them, not the force of the ejaculation or anything (like in many porn stories) but the warmth or added lubrication of the extra fluid. The other woman agreed with you.

I'm hoping that other women will chime in here. If the ones I spoke with aren't representative, I don't want to make the same mistake again.

Like you said, all women are different .... but ???

Thank you so very much for reading! Not much I could do for John since she was doing the talking and he wasn't revealing much to her, but I'm real glad it worked for you.

Softie, pretty psyched now :nana: :)
 
If you want more specific answers to those questions from other women, you might ask at the Author's Hangout or the How to Board. You might get more responses there.

SJ
 
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