Liar
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...I'm gonna ask you people. 
I have a brief notice in a story taking place in Los Angeles. The place is a major foreign consulate (do they have them in LA?) or a trade comitee office (if they don't have consulates) in some fancier part of town. The thing is, I don't know all that much about what places are called there, which are respectable and which are...well...ghettos. To give the reader a sense of location, I was going to write this...
"Their neon colored bikinis and cute butts sticking up in a perfect sunflower circle where they lay on their bellys chatting close together drew a lot of attention from the men close by. They constantly peered in the direction of the women for a stolen clance at their assets over newspapers, books, or pretending to sleep behind black sunglasses.
And if the people there wasn't enough of a feast for the eye, the roof terrace had a gorgeous view over..."
...over what? Hyde Park? Hollywood? Venice? Where could such a place convincingly be located?
#L
I have a brief notice in a story taking place in Los Angeles. The place is a major foreign consulate (do they have them in LA?) or a trade comitee office (if they don't have consulates) in some fancier part of town. The thing is, I don't know all that much about what places are called there, which are respectable and which are...well...ghettos. To give the reader a sense of location, I was going to write this...
"Their neon colored bikinis and cute butts sticking up in a perfect sunflower circle where they lay on their bellys chatting close together drew a lot of attention from the men close by. They constantly peered in the direction of the women for a stolen clance at their assets over newspapers, books, or pretending to sleep behind black sunglasses.
And if the people there wasn't enough of a feast for the eye, the roof terrace had a gorgeous view over..."
...over what? Hyde Park? Hollywood? Venice? Where could such a place convincingly be located?
#L