Just started this one

[matl]

She had been very surprised that he had been contacted by someone on the web sites bulletin board. Even more surprised that the man that contacted her husband was from their area. She read the e-mails that Ted, their new contact, had written, and the photos he had sent. The pics showed his cock in various stages of hardness. None of them showed it at it’s full hardness, but she could tell that he was quite large. She wrote a couple of responses to Ted, the first being very basic, with only the slightest references to sex. The second was much different. She told him of her fantasy of being bound in a hotel and taken by a stranger. She described her feelings of having a cock rubbed over her lips and not being able to see because of the blindfold

Does this sound like a good start?

 

[jubilee]

If you really want to know my honest opinion: that sounds far to straight as a beginning. If it goes on like that, it's going to be a quite short and/or boring story.

anyway, have fun.

 

[matl]

so jubilee, you think that should be more towards the middle of the story

 

[jubilee]

maybe it's a girls thing, but don't start to rough, build up some tension, make it last long, I guess you know what I mean

 

[matl]

Thanks jubilee, I'll get something together and repost when it's ready.

 

[jubilee]

always a pleasure when I can help

 

[MsLinnet]

the first bit look great let see some more please