Just one Line.

[NuclearFairy]

This is one of those posts that I look at the next day, and think: "Jesus, I have really got to cut back on the wine!" Looking at this today, I'm like, "What the Hell was I even talking about?"

Not sure, but it was funny.

 

[MillieDynamite]

From a story I'm working on. Lil' more than one sentence. This may become a series; it has some semi-autobiographical scenes.

One night, in a cheap motel, she saw a documentary about the city of Savannah, Georgia. At first, the girl thought about Georgia for her first name. But Savannah had a classy ring to it. So, without a second thought, she became Savannah.

 

[MillieDynamite]

And from the same story!

With his hands jammed deep in the pockets of a black Westmoore High School letter jacket, with two knight’s horses and three computer monitors in orange.

Great, a fucking Fake-Jock, chess team, and computer club. What’s next, letter jackets for teacher’s pets?

This begs the question: what is one line? If it is a play, it is one speech. That is all that is said, which follows the dialog tag in the script. But in a story, is a line a sentence or a paragraph? If it's a sentence, these two of them. If it is a paragraph, it's part of one, followed by the thoughts of MC. Either way, I'm breaking the rule here, and I guess I'm not worried I'll be bounced from the thread.

 

[ShelbyDawn57]

Found an older WIP I think I'm going to get ready for my next release. love it when I find lines like this in stuff I wrote:

“We need a shower, but you’re going to have to carry me. I don’t think I can walk.” She burst into laughter as she melted on top of him.

 

[iwatchus]

From chapter 4 of my new story, hopefully going live on Friday (ch 1-3 are going live Thursday)

She thinks she is going to Hell now. And she thinks she is a bad person, a slut. A lot of other self shaming. I guess she really hadn’t conquered that interior battle, just buried the puritanical beast for the day. But her orgasm resurrected it and the angry beast is now rampaging through her psyche, destroying all that it sees.

 

[NuclearFairy]

Their eyes perfectly met, his a little short for a guy, being matched with her a little tall for a gal.

From a short story I'm writing. Unfortunately the sentence seems incomplete, I'm sure I'll figure it out about the fifth time I read it.

 

[MillieDynamite]

But the sentence isn't incomplete; met and matched are the verbs, being is an adjective. So, @NuclearFairy, it might be clunky (I don't think it is personally), it's a real, honest-to-God sentence.

Their eyes perfectly met, his a little short for a guy, being matched with her a little tall for a gal.

From a short story I'm writing. Unfortunately the sentence seems incomplete, I'm sure I'll figure it out about the fifth time I read it.

 

[NuclearFairy]

But the sentence isn't incomplete; met and matched are the verbs, being is an adjective. So, @NuclearFairy, it might be clunky (I don't think it is personally), it's a real, honest-to-God sentence.

Thanks! ^_^

 

[Publius68]

“No one is that sound a sleeper,” Sam hissed. “Hell, after all the noise I made, if there were a graveyard nearby, we’d walk out into a Zombie Apocalypse!”