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Poems 911-Just another poem feedback thread.
Redwave is up first with an ode to all things trek.
Seven of Nine
by REDWAVE ©
Space Ice Vixen
I drool over you each time I watch Voyager
You have that dominatrix look down pat
You seem so cold, so harsh, so uncaring
And yet (in your form-fitting costume) so much a woman
Even though I mostly go the other way
I would love to have you standing over my helpless abject form And hear you say: "Resistance is futile. You will be dominated!" Then you would release a velcro strip on your oh-so-tight outfit And your pink quivering glistening pussy would leap out at my eager tongue
And you would say: "Eat my pussy, slave, and do it real good-- and maybe I won't beat you up too bad afterwards-- just slap you around a little"
And yes, I would eat your pussy to the very best of my ability (Though I'm much more adept at sucking cock)
And maybe, just maybe, you might even reciprocate a little-- Although that's really too much for an abject slave like me to hope for-- Until then, I remain your adoring worshipper from afar Back here in the Alpha Quadrant
Seven of Nine
My penis salutes you
Redwave I will comply and since were are not using thumbs up or down to vote,I'm afraid my penis cannot join yours in salutation. Instead I remain flaccid.
I think it could be amusing as a mad rant.
But as poem I find it so much interstellar dust.
This piece fail's to leave space dock, it does not soar for me as a result I cannot become involved in your lust. Since there is no connection for me I am left out of the voyage and wondering what it is I have just read.
Where is the clear imagery of the Jason and the Argonauts piece? The playful tone this might have attained is phasered out of existence by the obscenities. I like the dominatrix idea that would have been interesting to make the focal point of this. Perhaps using borgism’s to punctuate the text. I must therefore pass this one to the collective; in the hope it will be assimilated and sent back to us as something more enjoyable.
A side note I must admit to enjoying the link provided in your profile. Now I must take my leave.
Engage!
U.P.
Redwave is up first with an ode to all things trek.
Seven of Nine
by REDWAVE ©
Space Ice Vixen
I drool over you each time I watch Voyager
You have that dominatrix look down pat
You seem so cold, so harsh, so uncaring
And yet (in your form-fitting costume) so much a woman
Even though I mostly go the other way
I would love to have you standing over my helpless abject form And hear you say: "Resistance is futile. You will be dominated!" Then you would release a velcro strip on your oh-so-tight outfit And your pink quivering glistening pussy would leap out at my eager tongue
And you would say: "Eat my pussy, slave, and do it real good-- and maybe I won't beat you up too bad afterwards-- just slap you around a little"
And yes, I would eat your pussy to the very best of my ability (Though I'm much more adept at sucking cock)
And maybe, just maybe, you might even reciprocate a little-- Although that's really too much for an abject slave like me to hope for-- Until then, I remain your adoring worshipper from afar Back here in the Alpha Quadrant
Seven of Nine
My penis salutes you
Redwave I will comply and since were are not using thumbs up or down to vote,I'm afraid my penis cannot join yours in salutation. Instead I remain flaccid.
I think it could be amusing as a mad rant.
But as poem I find it so much interstellar dust.
This piece fail's to leave space dock, it does not soar for me as a result I cannot become involved in your lust. Since there is no connection for me I am left out of the voyage and wondering what it is I have just read.
Where is the clear imagery of the Jason and the Argonauts piece? The playful tone this might have attained is phasered out of existence by the obscenities. I like the dominatrix idea that would have been interesting to make the focal point of this. Perhaps using borgism’s to punctuate the text. I must therefore pass this one to the collective; in the hope it will be assimilated and sent back to us as something more enjoyable.
A side note I must admit to enjoying the link provided in your profile. Now I must take my leave.
Engage!
U.P.
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