Jo Ann was as pure as the driven snow,

[i812]

then she drifted.

Please, please allow yourself to be cajoled into reading my first story.

Is it too much to ask for "A Little Help?"

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=293818

 

[mjl2010]

then she drifted.

Please, please allow yourself to be cajoled into reading my first story.

Is it too much to ask for "A Little Help?"

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=293818

I read it. Not bad. That kind of story isn't my thing though and I'm certainly no expert on writing. You've more guts than me, I haven't submitted my first story yet. Tonight the wife is going to read something I wrote and then if there's no major problems, I'm going to send it in.

Keep writing

MJL

 

[i812]

Thanks for reading "A Little Help?"

I read it. Not bad. That kind of story isn't my thing though and I'm certainly no expert on writing. You've more guts than me, I haven't submitted my first story yet. Tonight the wife is going to read something I wrote and then if there's no major problems, I'm going to send it in.

Keep writing

MJL

I tried to thank you for the kind words by email, but you have that disabled. Also, I wanted to offer you some words of encouragement--post your story.

My experience today has been most interesting. I suspect your's will be the same.

My email inbox is getting blitzed. A fair number are 24 carat gold plated hand picked idiots. Illiterate imbeciles. The trolls.

The rest are an entertaining mix. I appreciate them all, but one in particular. A woman sent an anonyous email letting me know that she read "A Little Help?" early this morning. Now she was driving to work and her panties were wet from thinking about it. She said she loves to be used.

She made my day!

 

[not_with_my_wife]

Keep Writing

There's a ton of people out there who hate what they classify as, "just another wimp husband story." Kick her ass out, and divorce the bitch. Admittedly a lot of these stories are just plain crap. I thought your's was well written, and I like the good ones. I've wanted my wife to get nailed by someone else for years; if that makes me a wimp so be it.

I'm comfortable in believing that she'd never leave me or love anyone else.

I ran hard copy of your story. I only do that when I intend to read it later when one hand is wrapped around my cock, and the other is holding the story. Just can't get the hang of jerking off in front of a monitor.

So try a couple more, and if the comments get to you worse then a spouse who fucks around...probably should quit writing.

Hang in there. At least you had the balls to write and publish.

 

[i812]

Thank you for your post.

You have paid me a tremendous compliment.

The whole idea of writing erotic literature--Literotica, is sexual arousal. I read it to get so hard that if I walk outside and slam it against the side of a metal power-line transmission pole, people will hear THUNG! THUNG! in the surrounding counties.

 

[starrkers]

Nicely written

And I think you're very brave. The trolls will overflow your email with their tripe.
I have half a dozen or so stories up now, only one in Loving Wives. It is the only one that has gotten bad comments, and all of those have been from trolls that seem to take the story seriously, as an item of fact.

Well done, I say. A well written piece, with a logical progression. I look forward to seeing more of your work.

 

[i812]

Thank you for reading the story and for the kind words.

By the way, I read your Loving Wives story "The Best Game" when it posted. I rated it a ten, but they only let me vote it a five.

Here is a link for anybody that missed it:

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=292446

I also read the public comments and they were a factor in my decision to disable voting and public comments. How did they conclude that Mel Gibson and British spelling were of such utmost importance?

Please allow a Floridian to label them mouldy arseholes!

As for the trolls, I don't think think that there are that many of them. I think it is a lot of the same ones. They are not psychotic, but they certainly suffer from a neurosis. A dead give away is that they are the first to read the Loving Wives stories.

Their paranoid personalities can be easily treated with psychotropic drugs. My guess is that have been treated, and they are off their meds.

I hope nobody takes them seriously because unfortunately for them, they are dead enders.

 

[mjl2010]

Thanks for the return encouragement.

"Wife Christina" has been submitted now (yesterday). I'm just dying to see if it makes it in. It will be in the First Time category. There is a lot more done there, I'm just waiting now to see how it does.

I have something else to submit eventually but it's huge. Already it's the length of six to eight full length novels and nowhere near complete. I figure it's about one sixth of the way done. I must be insane.

Anyway, I got over the story submission fear and sent in my short. I suppose I'll get plenty of critcism and I hope some of it's constructive.

By the way, I went and turned on my email and private messages. I didn't know they were off. Thanks.

MJL

 

[i812]

"Wife Christina" has been submitted now
MJL

Let me know when it posts. I am looking forward to it.

 

[Arafura]

I liked the way you used the letter format to tell what was essentially her story. Made for an interesting mix of perspectives.

Also the image of her bent over the trunk of the car, some of the guys holding her while one fucks her and her knees are shaking from orgasm...hot stuff! Well done.

My only criticisms would be that there was some odd comma usage, just kinda sprinkled where they weren't necessary. Also, maybe when she's directly talking about what happened you could set it off as though it's dialog, "like this"? Just a thought.

 

[i812]

My only criticisms would be that there was some odd comma usage, just kinda sprinkled where they weren't necessary. Also, maybe when she's directly talking about what happened you could set it off as though it's dialog, "like this"? Just a thought.

Thank you so much for the feedback. You are right on target with the commas. I have a tendency to assign them randomly.

The truth is that I misunderstood what my editor wrote. I thought he indicated that I should go ahead and post. However, I received his corrections today. He is not as kind as you are. I will file an edited version shortly.

Thanks again for reading the story, and for going to the effort of commenting here.