I've rattled the cage of anonymous again

[mikey2much]

It seems that I might have stepped on some toes with my new story.
I have gotten comments that I must be mal-adjusted prevert to want to think that a woman could be trained. If you will listen to the news you can see that the good old U.S. of A. uses the same methods to break people down. Isolation, hunger, nakedness,pain and humiliation.

In my defense I want to say that you do train dogs just the way that the girl is treated with rewards and punishment for all their actions. The only difference is that with dogs the man is there to become the dogs leader. In the story I wrote the man didn't want the girl to be able to fix her hate on him as a person. He left her alone to deal with her situation and only approached her when he felt that she was ready for it.

One comment said that I seemed to get tired of writing and just ended the story too soon. I agree that I could have built the scenes a little better and let the two of them come together over a longer period of time. In my mind I felt that I would bore my readers if I lingered too long, it is a pretty long story. I am not ruling out a pt two in the future since I like both of the people in the story myself.

I hope that some of you will take the time to read it and tell me what you think about it. The name of the stopry is Old Fashioned Love and there is a link below for it.
I look forward to hearing your comments.
mike

 

[kandie]

LOL! I would not worry about it if I were you, I rattle their cage all the time. If they left you a rude comment, well at least you know that your story is being read. Most of them do it to see if you have balls. Don't send a rude message back to them at all, and keep writing. TTFN HUGS!

 

[mikey2much]

LOL! I would not worry about it if I were you, I rattle their cage all the time. If they left you a rude comment, well at least you know that your story is being read. Most of them do it to see if you have balls. Don't send a rude message back to them at all, and keep writing. TTFN HUGS!

Sounds like you might have ' been there done that ' yourself.
thanks for the advice and comment.
mike

 

[Jenny_Jackson]

Mikey,
The writers on Lit bitch about the Trolls a lot. But don't be pulled into their game. The more you screw with them, the more they will screw with you. It's what they do.

 

[mikey2much]

good advice

Mikey,
The writers on Lit bitch about the Trolls a lot. But don't be pulled into their game. The more you screw with them, the more they will screw with you. It's what they do.

Thanks Jenny, I am sure that you are right. And I have been getting a lot of good letters by email. so some of the readers think that the story isn't too bad.