It's all about the sexy stories!

[sugoi_beppin]

I don't know if anyone else in here is into the kinds of things I am into. I have an account on adult fan fiction and have some stories posted. I would love to post them on Literotica too under the fan section but I didn't know if anyone would want to read them.

I would like to put the link up to my story archive so some people can take a look and see if they like what I have up there and tell me (and the other lovely lit erotica people) if it was a good read or a good idea or not. If so, I'll post here, if not and you say P.U.!!! then I'll stick to posting on the forums here but posting my stories there.

http://adultfan.nexcess.net/aff/authors.php?no=1296773880

They are cartoon based fan stories for InuYasha and Futurama (but also a non erotic action story of Full Metal Alchemist) Please. I'd love some people to give me some feed back because I'd really like to put some stuff up on this site.

 

[BlackShanglan]

Sugoi -

I will have a look purely because I like your name. You might, however, have better luck posting this on the story feedback forum, which is where people normally look if they are willing to discuss stories and give feedback on them.

Shanglan

 

[sugoi_beppin]

Thanks.

 

[BlackShanglan]

Sugoi -

By all means, I would post them. I read your first-listed "Futurama" story and liked what you were doing. You caught the voices and patterns of behavior nicely and created a good feel for the series.

There are some places where that dedication perhaps slows the plot a bit; at times you do an excellent job of describing the scene in the way the show would present it, but end up sacrificing pacing to those more lengthy descriptions. The opening, for example, is a perfect description of the typical opening of an episode, but reads rather slowly. If you are looking for ways to improve, you might think about the challenge of trying to create the feel of the series without getting too bogged down in lengthy descriptions, particularly of characters who aren't going to be involved in the main action. But that's a finer point and one that is bound to crop up when trying to move ideas from a visual medium to a written one. I say wade in and enjoy - although do note that your anime stories would need to be slightly revised to meet Literotica's 18 year age minimum.

Best of luck -

Shanglan