Isabelle Chapter 02 (finally)

[Basin City]

http://english.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=251565

I'm sorry this has taken so long to put up. But I got mithered a lot to continue this (god knows why) so here it is. Hey, I love writing really.

I don't know if this is the direction people expected it to take (i don't know if this is the direction I first intended to take) so it would be interesting to get some feedback.

I think there is a story brewing in there somewhere.

Enjoy.

 

[J.Q. Hack]

Isabelle Chapter 02

I read both chapters and enjoyed them both. You really took some time and care to portray Isabelle and I thought the writing was pretty attentive to that. The scenes and imagery was hot but not overblown. The 2nd chapter had some typos that could've been easily avoided.

Having said that both chapters seemed to belong to two different story lines. If you plan on taking these stories further you'll have to draw them together somehow or abandon one altogether. I don't have any suggestions as for which one to get rid of or develop but does Isabelle's actions with Tyrell really seem in character for her? I didn't really get that vibe from her especially from the first chapter.

J.Q.

 

[Basin City]

I think what I was trying to get at was Isabelle's "transformation" into a sexual being, ignited by her intimacy with her father.

the ""Since when" a lot of things" line was the key.

Yes. It would be very out of character for chapter 1 Isabelle to go off with Tyrell, but she's becoming a very different person now; and anyway, we don't actually know what she has in store for him...

Thanks loads for the response.

 

[J.Q. Hack]

Isabelle Chapter 02

I guess I missed the "since when" line when I read it through. Having said that there was little to indicate any significant amount of time had elapsed between the two stories. I thought since this was a second chapter the story was picking up within the same day or perhaps even a week or so later than where the original left off. Perhaps this would have been better as another story involving Isabelle and not necessarily a second chapter. If you'd wanted to make it another story with Isabelle a simple note at the top explaining that Isabelle is the same character from one of your other stories would've sufficed quite well.

J.Q.