I have submitted many stories to Literotica and they have come back for something as simple as a comma missing or no reason at all.
Can someone tell me does this story have potential?
Meeting Tonya
I had just started working in the hood and noticed this sweet young black lady working across the street.
She said hello and smiled at me. Her smile warmed my heart.
It had been awhile since a woman had been able to do this since my last girlfriend was a bitch.
I introduced myself and she said her name was Tonya.
Since I was new, I didn’t want to come on to strong the first month or so
Finally after 3 months I asked her to lunch and she accepted my offer.
We went to a local Deli and we spent almost 2 hours getting to know each other.
Talking to Tonya was great, I felt like a weight had been lifted.
We made arrangements for dinner one night after work.
We went out one weekend to dinner and a movie.
I hugged Tonya at her door, kissing her cheek was about as far as she would allow me to go.
If and when I was allowed to get into her panties it would take me more then 3 or 4 dates.
After one date we walked along the beach and held hands as we walked.
Her soft hand felt good in mine,
We sat and watched the moon rise over the water. She placed her head on my shoulder and I put my arm around her shoulder
Soon we were kissing and my hand slid down the front of her blouse.
I unbuttoned her blouse and soon my hand slipped inside her bra. I felt her nipples become erect under my fingers.
She pushed away from me. “Not here “
She took my hand and we went across the street to her condo.
We undressed each other and soon we were on her bed. Our hands exploring our bodies. I was soon between her legs, tasting her sweet juices
Her hips started to push harder into my face as I sucked her harder. Her juices exploded on my face.
She lay there breathing hard and then her hand reached down and stroked my raging hard on.
She pushed me down on the bed and then sucking my balls, cock and sliding her tongue inside my pee slit.
I grabber her head and held it there. Her head bobbed up and down on my hard shaft
She stopped sucking me and then straddled my body.
She slid my cock inside her and rode me hard
Her cunt muscles squeezed my cock.
Faster and faster she slammed down on my cock
I was bucking back fucking my Nubian beauty.
I came inside her.
She slid off me and lay next to me, stroking my chest hair
We kissed and fell asleep
Can someone tell me does this story have potential?
Meeting Tonya
I had just started working in the hood and noticed this sweet young black lady working across the street.
She said hello and smiled at me. Her smile warmed my heart.
It had been awhile since a woman had been able to do this since my last girlfriend was a bitch.
I introduced myself and she said her name was Tonya.
Since I was new, I didn’t want to come on to strong the first month or so
Finally after 3 months I asked her to lunch and she accepted my offer.
We went to a local Deli and we spent almost 2 hours getting to know each other.
Talking to Tonya was great, I felt like a weight had been lifted.
We made arrangements for dinner one night after work.
We went out one weekend to dinner and a movie.
I hugged Tonya at her door, kissing her cheek was about as far as she would allow me to go.
If and when I was allowed to get into her panties it would take me more then 3 or 4 dates.
After one date we walked along the beach and held hands as we walked.
Her soft hand felt good in mine,
We sat and watched the moon rise over the water. She placed her head on my shoulder and I put my arm around her shoulder
Soon we were kissing and my hand slid down the front of her blouse.
I unbuttoned her blouse and soon my hand slipped inside her bra. I felt her nipples become erect under my fingers.
She pushed away from me. “Not here “
She took my hand and we went across the street to her condo.
We undressed each other and soon we were on her bed. Our hands exploring our bodies. I was soon between her legs, tasting her sweet juices
Her hips started to push harder into my face as I sucked her harder. Her juices exploded on my face.
She lay there breathing hard and then her hand reached down and stroked my raging hard on.
She pushed me down on the bed and then sucking my balls, cock and sliding her tongue inside my pee slit.
I grabber her head and held it there. Her head bobbed up and down on my hard shaft
She stopped sucking me and then straddled my body.
She slid my cock inside her and rode me hard
Her cunt muscles squeezed my cock.
Faster and faster she slammed down on my cock
I was bucking back fucking my Nubian beauty.
I came inside her.
She slid off me and lay next to me, stroking my chest hair
We kissed and fell asleep
