Is my story that bad?

[M Crim]

I'm looking for a little feedback about my lastest story. The story, Cabin By The Lake , an entry in the Earth Day Contest has been getting some pretty low votes.

I've recieved some pretty positive messages in the public comment area but so far the only feedback I've recieved is people wanting to chat/flirt with me.

I'd like to know what people don't like about my story. Or where I went wrong with the story.

 

[msboy8]

I'm looking for a little feedback about my lastest story. The story, Cabin By The Lake , an entry in the Earth Day Contest has been getting some pretty low votes.

I've recieved some pretty positive messages in the public comment area but so far the only feedback I've recieved is people wanting to chat/flirt with me.

I'd like to know what people don't like about my story. Or where I went wrong with the story.

I R.V.C.ed on your story. It was a good story. Perhaps the incest readership didn't like that the sex was not just incest, but was also normal. I don't know.

Keep writing!

 

[M Crim]

I was thinking the opposite. That the readership didn't like story because there was incest. You're probably right.

Thanks for checking out my story.

 

[sadsac]

I'm looking for a little feedback about my lastest story. The story, Cabin By The Lake , an entry in the Earth Day Contest has been getting some pretty low votes.

I've recieved some pretty positive messages in the public comment area but so far the only feedback I've recieved is people wanting to chat/flirt with me.

I'd like to know what people don't like about my story. Or where I went wrong with the story.

I kind of liked it.... it made me feel good. Don't know why you would think that people wouldn't. Just as long as you don't take the voting response too seriously, like I unfortunately do.

Anyhow, keep up the "great" work!

Regards,

pete

 

[sadsac]

Um... M. Crim.

Please forgive me, but after I replied to your submission, I checked out your
Bio.

And I can't figure out what the heck that enticing pic. is all about! Mine is much clearer... unfortunately!

Pleeese..... enlighten a person.

pete.

 

[M Crim]

Thanks for checking out my story. I do appreciate that.

I'm not sure what you're asking about the pic. You'll have to enlighten me on that.

Molly

Um... M. Crim.

Please forgive me, but after I replied to your submission, I checked out your
Bio.

And I can't figure out what the heck that enticing pic. is all about! Mine is much clearer... unfortunately!

Pleeese..... enlighten a person.

pete.

 

[Colleen Thomas]

Crim,

Anytime you enter a contest there are some automatic pros and cons.

The pros are quick posting, increaded readership and enhanced probability of votes and feedback.

The cons are that you are ore subject to trolling and the inate competitiveness of readers who want their favorite to win often leads to them giving rival works a lower score. Sometimes deserved of course, but sometimes the motivation is to see their favorite win.

You have to take the good with the bad. Realize a monetary prize is involved and just hope for the best.

-Colly

 

[M Crim]

Colly,

Good points. This is only the second time I've entered a contest and just by entering I feel like I'm learning a lot.

Molly

 

[An Awful Cad]

Ms. M

I read the story, and although the incest cat isn't really my thing, I liked it and liked the development of the relationship with Paul.

One thing that bothered me, and maybe others voting, was the tone of the piece in the last few paragraphs (from the sex scene with Colin on), specifically the narrator's attitude towards Colin.

You did a good job of highlighting the feelings for her brother that the event rekindled, but it made her come across as somewhat callous to her current BF. I have a weak spot for less than sympathetic characters, but your character struck me as kind of bitchy, and that's a turn-off.
.

 

[M Crim]

At first, I disagreed with you. I thought you didn't understand my character. Then I realized, that maybe I didn't understand my character. The ending the I wrote was kind of just thrown on. I didn't know how to end it. Now, I think it was kind of out of character for the lead in my story.

Ms. M

I read the story, and although the incest cat isn't really my thing, I liked it and liked the development of the relationship with Paul.

One thing that bothered me, and maybe others voting, was the tone of the piece in the last few paragraphs (from the sex scene with Colin on), specifically the narrator's attitude towards Colin.

You did a good job of highlighting the feelings for her brother that the event rekindled, but it made her come across as somewhat callous to her current BF. I have a weak spot for less than sympathetic characters, but your character struck me as kind of bitchy, and that's a turn-off.
.

 

[M Crim]

The other idea I had, forgot to say it before. I think it would've been better with a happy ending. But maybe that's for a second chapter.

 

[angelicminx]

The other idea I had, forgot to say it before. I think it would've been better with a happy ending. But maybe that's for a second chapter.

I thought you left off well for a second chapter. I enjoyed the story M Crim. Maybe I'm a bitch, but I thought her feelings about Colin made her real. She is comparing every man to the love of her life and having them all come up short. Normal, IMO. Had she continued the charade, I would have been disappointed. As it stands, Colin is out of her life and you have an opening for a much anticipated second chapter.

 

[hiddenself]

The other idea I had, forgot to say it before. I think it would've been better with a happy ending. But maybe that's for a second chapter.

NO!
This is a great little story. It has a beginning/setting, a treasured flashback, a juxtaposition with the pale present, and a very real (if a bit sad) ending. It is self-contained. It has strong emotions. It has reality grounding. And the ending is partly what makes it so compelling. Life is like that -- there are no happy endings due to the deus ex machina.

No tinkering required.
No sequel required (you want to go Hollywood after this?).
Keep writing.
!!!

 

[M Crim]

Many stories I read on Lit have happy characters and happy endings. I don't think everyones lives work like that. I know mine doesn't. I might try a happy ending someday for a story. I'm debating a seqaul in my head. If the idea feels write, I'll write it.

Thanks angelicminx and hiddenself for taking the time to read and comment on my story. I do appreciate any and all feedback I've ever gotten. Just kind of tired of the feedback being men hitting on me (however, that is good some of the time).

 

[espeteroh]

I'm looking for a little feedback about my lastest story. The story, Cabin By The Lake , an entry in the Earth Day Contest has been getting some pretty low votes.

I've recieved some pretty positive messages in the public comment area but so far the only feedback I've recieved is people wanting to chat/flirt with me.

I'd like to know what people don't like about my story. Or where I went wrong with the story.

Your story is pretty good. And after having looked at your online bio I can understand the desire to flirt with you from what you've shown. Take it as a compliment and if you're not interested, don't respond. I think it's that easy. I'd flirt with you but at least one of my daughters and possibly two are older than you. That should tell you something.

 

[An Awful Cad]

In all forms of public art, there is often a disconnect between what is popular and what is considered "good" by the learned practitioners of the medium. Check out the movie theater box office charts some day for a prime example.

The original question you posed had to do with voting results and why they were below your expectations. I'm no expert, but I bet that, just as in the real world, there is a mass audience here that has well defined tastes. While I'm generalizing, I'll throw this out: the "average" Literotica reader is a horny male, who is here for purposes of fantasy, not literature, and who often votes (and sometimes sends flirty feedback, too) based on the fantasies "aroused" by a particular story.

I'd say your profile/photo goes a long way to ensuring decent response, but my original comment was basically pointing out that if you choose to write about characters that somehow impede the fantasies of your readers, you may be subject to negative feedback or voting. This of course does not mean that your story is bad.

By all means, keep writing, and if you're happy with what you write, just ignore the voting.
.

 

[M Crim]

Good points to think about as I write more stories.