I'm scaring myself

[Jenny_Jackson]

All the stories I have written have had heroins who are fairly normal. I started writing a story last night for the Halloween Contest. This heroin is way too much like me: bad attitude, foul mouth, kind of slutty, the whole bit. Rereading the story I found it scary to see so much of me on the page. Is this normal?

An example :
"Grumbling, David lead the way out to the car parked in the driveway. He opened the drivers door, climbed in and started the motor. I went around and got in the passenger side. So fucking much for gentlemanly behavior. Soon we were traveling along I-5 headed south past Tigard. “Before it’s too late to turn back, what did you forget?” David growled. This was an old routine. For the entire 10 years of marriage every time we went someplace, David assumed I had left something important at home. So once I left the water running in the kitchen sink. Big God Damn deal. Not like I burned the fucking house down or anything."

When I reread this I remembered this is exactly the way it was when I was married, even my thoughts.
(Still just in draft... sorry)
Well?

 

[CopyCarver]

Geez, you say, "bad attitude, foul mouth, kind of slutty, the whole bit," as if those were bad things.

Seriously, unless your story is making you seriously uncomfortable, I don't see any problem.

BTW, you might want to stick an "e" onto heroine, so the DEA doesn't kick your door down.

 

[Jenny_Jackson]

Geez, you say, "bad attitude, foul mouth, kind of slutty, the whole bit," as if those were bad things.

Seriously, unless your story is making you seriously uncomfortable, I don't see any problem.

BTW, you might want to stick an "e" onto heroine, so the DEA doesn't kick your door down.

Yes... I know... Like I said. That's just a first draft. I only made it through about 2.5 pages. Then started reading what I'd written this afternoon when I was going to continue on it. Haven't even spell checked yet.

 

[AchtungNight]

This is perfectly normal, Jennie. I get disturbed by my stories sometimes too. But then, hey, sex is supposed to be somewhat disturbing. You just have to find a way to make it work for you. Best of luck.

 

[Carnevil9]

Everything Hemingway wrote was about himself. And you know how he ended up! Maybe you are right to be scared.......Carney

 

[Kain__Thornn]

All the stories I have written have had heroins who are fairly normal. I started writing a story last night for the Halloween Contest. This heroin is way too much like me: bad attitude, foul mouth, kind of slutty, the whole bit. Rereading the story I found it scary to see so much of me on the page. Is this normal?

An example :
"Grumbling, David lead the way out to the car parked in the driveway. He opened the drivers door, climbed in and started the motor. I went around and got in the passenger side. So fucking much for gentlemanly behavior. Soon we were traveling along I-5 headed south past Tigard. “Before it’s too late to turn back, what did you forget?” David growled. This was an old routine. For the entire 10 years of marriage every time we went someplace, David assumed I had left something important at home. So once I left the water running in the kitchen sink. Big God Damn deal. Not like I burned the fucking house down or anything."

When I reread this I remembered this is exactly the way it was when I was married, even my thoughts.
(Still just in draft... sorry)
Well?

I write a great deal of myself into my stories, although I do color him/me with a bit more outwardness.

 

[Jenny_Jackson]

I write a great deal of myself into my stories, although I do color him/me with a bit more outwardness.

<< laughing>> You know me, Kain... if I were any more "outward" I'd get arrested