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I posted this on my regular poetry board - a straight one. *grin*
In the "General" category, where everyone can see it.

Is it just me, or is there a mood showing?

Milkmaid

A pat and a kiss for her gentle friend
Generous in response to her care
She kneels, settling on her stool
To grasp and tug, pushing back her hair.

Her efforts are rewarded now
With sweet and heavy, steaming
Slickly sloshing, creamlets floating
In her buckets deep and dreaming.

Up the hill now, briskly step
Anticipation, heart beats harder
For now her travails really commence
The reward, decadence of larder.

She approaches the barrel
With hesitation, a maiden
Cream yoked on her shoulders,
The same hue as her burden.

With a sigh, she surrenders it
To the barrel, then covers
Placing the bung in its hole
She plunges, thinking of time another.

Pump and wind, slickly churn,
How earnestly she strains.
Deltas of effort stain her dress
She drips, thinking of her gain.

Amongst her skirts, a kitty lurks
Rubbing 'gainst mistress's gaiters.
After the sweat and labor done,
Pretty pussy gets petted later.

At last it’s done, into the pans -
Down she goes to her dinner.
Peeping boy behind a rock
Dips in and licks his fingers.
 
Oops - wrong forum.

Who can I do to get this moved to Poetry feedback?
 
No worries. I'm glad I got a chance to read it. I wouldn't have if it'd been where you thought you were putting it. I'd just copy/paste it over if I were you and not worry about it being here. Shoot you'll probably even get some feedback you wouldn't have otherwise. Like from me, for instance. :cool:

I thought it was really good, by the way. Very nice imagery, and good flow.

TC gives this one a thumbs up.:D
 
Tom Collins said:
No worries. I'm glad I got a chance to read it. I wouldn't have if it'd been where you thought you were putting it. I'd just copy/paste it over if I were you and not worry about it being here. Shoot you'll probably even get some feedback you wouldn't have otherwise. Like from me, for instance. :cool:

I thought it was really good, by the way. Very nice imagery, and good flow.

TC gives this one a thumbs up.:D
*pleased* Thank you!

Not terribly thought out, just some free-floating horniness that I had to get out. *grin*
 
Funny - I got more feedback here than on the poetry forum, where it has been iggied so far. Random. *grin*

Thank you Darkside, yevkassm and Svenskaflicka. I appreciate your comments.
 
I love it. Playful and sweet, a tiny bit naughty.

I'm also glad I got the chance to read it.

I'm curious as to the response on the General Poetry Board?

:)
 
I thought it was very clever, the double entendre, without compromising either meaning.
How was it received on your regular poetry board? :devil:
 
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