I'll put it up for a vote...

[nakdsub]

I have an idea for a "loving wives" story. My problem is the ending. A brief scenario;
married couple have 7 yr. old daughter.
While she is away, hubby has strong suspicions his wife is going to cheat on him. he is on his way to catch her in the act.
does he catch her in the act and divorce or,
does she chicken out realizing what she will risk for a one time fling and he finds her alone?

 

[wheelchairman85]

I think he should find her alone because the wife realized that the risk of destroying her marriage is not worth a one time fling.

 

[nakdsub]

Okay that's one vote for...

finding her alone. Of course they would have hot sex as well then.
Do I hear any more votes?

 

[nakdsub]

Come'on people,...

I need votes, thumbs up? thumbs down?

 

[Carnevil9]

Of course she cheats on his ass!

It isn't drama without conflict! Nobody wants a happy ending! Have him catch her in flagrant dilecto, sucking the shit out of his boss's/brother's/best friend's cock and fucking them into delirium! Then he can beat the snot out of the dude and have savage make-up sex with his wife.

C'mon, man! This is smut 101!!......Carney

 

[dutchsmurf]

I think it kinda depends on why she is (considering) cheating on him in the first place. I mean, that usually doesn't come out of nowhere.

 

[jeninflorida]

cheating adds drama....mix feelings. hurt. feeling betrayed. lost, maybe he/she wanted to watch?

 

[PaulBlart]

No question. He finds her alone. Problem is, you don't give enough info, though. What is her motivation for contemplating cheating or was she ever? It this just his imagination? What is the problem/problems between them and how do you resolve those? Finding her fucking some other guy (or girl, or couple, or group) is predictable and you will likely be able to lead readers down that road and then add an interesting turn. Fidelity, love and hot monogamous sex. WHAT A CONCEPT!

 

[hpycpl]

Why not have her fantasize about having an affair, even do a bit more than usual flirting with a willing candidate. Let hubby see the flirtation and have his doubts about her fidelity. when he tries to catch her, he finds her alone and they confess to each other what has been going on. her, fantasizing and flirting; him, doubting and maybe being excited by the thought of it. They then can both do some role play or decide to go for the real thing...

 

[steelrfn]

Finds her in bed with a guy who gives her something the husband hasn't.... and she hasn't asked for.

Offers alot more options for development of the story line. The one she's with could even be female and she's been afraid to admit the idea intrigued her, BDSM, anal... the options are pretty much endless.

If she's not cheating the story pretty much only goes one way... unless you toss in a twist at the end where after she and hubby get all made up and he apologizes for not trusting her and leaves again she sneaks whomever out that was hiding in the closet for the whole scene

 

[nakdsub]

Wow! a lot of great responses...

Thanks. I have hashed out the end. For the longest time I couldn't make up my mind but I think I have come up with the perfect end...at least I hope so.
Thank you all for your input.

 

[iadoremywife]

Almost cheats. Kissing and hands under skirt, but she leaves at the last minute. This happend at a girfriends house with a guy renting the spare room in her house. Even though she didn't cheat (that time) she keeps finding excuses to go to her girlfriends house. Once when she is over there she accidently hits your number on her cell. You listen as she__________.

 

[Reshbod]

As he is on his way to the confrontation, his imagination runs away and he can see the scene, then his reaction. At the climax of the story he shakes out of his trance and continues on. He then finds his wife alone planning a romantic cruise for them or something similar.

Of course this could be told in such a way that it seems like it is happening only to be surprised to find it's a dream that is resolved by a happy ending. Although the fact that he was so angry and ready for confrontation says something and it may not be as happy an ending as it would seem.

 

[nakdsub]

I have decided on the ending...However

I am going to write the story with the ending I have selected. However, after it posts, I will write the alternate ending here, on this thread. I believe both endings are good. It amazing how you can change the entire story with one, small paragraph at the end.

 

[JRaven]

I am going to write the story with the ending I have selected. However, after it posts, I will write the alternate ending here, on this thread. I believe both endings are good. It amazing how you can change the entire story with one, small paragraph at the end.

Well crap. And I was going to vote twice...

Jenny

 

[silverwhisper]

i'm just curious: is there any value derived from the fact that they have a kid? is it to add the "homewrecker" meme to the story?

ed

 

[nakdsub]

The fact that they have a child

has no bearing on the story other than...well, I can't say that or I'll give it away.
Let me just say, having a child makes them more of a happy couple.

 

[silverwhisper]

OK, wasn't sure. you seemed pretty specific about it but i wasn't really seeing a whole lot of integration of the kid into the story.

ed

 

[BuckyDuckman]

And this is different from the Pina Colada song in which way?

http://youtu.be/QVdhZwK7cS8

 

[nakdsub]

There is absolutely no reference to...

Pina Coladas in my story. Not sure where you came up with that one?
The story is currently running on SOL and should post here in another 2 or 3 days.
It's called, "Road to a Showdown."
Nothing to do with Pina Coladas.

 

[BuckyDuckman]

Pina Coladas in my story. Not sure where you came up with that one?
The story is currently running on SOL and should post here in another 2 or 3 days.
It's called, "Road to a Showdown."
Nothing to do with Pina Coladas.

Have you listened to song? Husband reads personal ad. Replies to personal ad. Meets person from personal ad. Discovers the person is his wife.

A) He discovers she's intending on cheating.
B) She finds out he knows.

Personally, I think the song wimps out a great set-up for some real drama, but that's just me.

 

[mythtrav16]

I am going to write the story with the ending I have selected. However, after it posts, I will write the alternate ending here, on this thread. I believe both endings are good. It amazing how you can change the entire story with one, small paragraph at the end.

finding her alone. Of course they would have hot sex as well then.
Do I hear any more votes?

Seeing as how you've already apparently decided, I don't know if you still want input. But how about finding her alone, and it turns out all the things that fueled hubby's suspicion, e.g. the odd phone calls she briefly answers in a hushed voice, were actually engineered by the wife so that he would follow her to the motel room, blood boiling, ready to catch her with another man.

Their sex life has been kind of dull the past few years, so she figures getting him raging on jealousy will make for a good coital ravaging when it turns out there's no "other man" for him to take his strong emotions out on.

 

[nakdsub]

Myth

The story is already written and is currently running on SOL and should post here in 2 or 3 days.
However; that is a great plot!!! I love it.
If you are an author, you should write it. If not, would you mind if I wrote it?

 

[mythtrav16]

The story is already written and is currently running on SOL and should post here in 2 or 3 days.
However; that is a great plot!!! I love it.
If you are an author, you should write it. If not, would you mind if I wrote it?

Not at all. I'm currently having a really bad case of writer's block, so I won't be writing it. Even if I didn't I doubt I'd write a Loving Wives story for Lit. I hear that it's the stomping grounds for the site's most unfriendly readers.

 

[nakdsub]

Thanks

You're right about LW, the feedback can be brutal, but it also gets a much larger readership.
I usually write a lot of emotion into my characters. I'm wondering how to make the wife likable after torturing her husband into believing she is cheating.