If you're happy and ya know it....

[c.fey]

read my new stories!! And tell me how you like or don't like them. Like, I hope. Thanks!!

Baking Bread

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=43632

Welcome To My Storm

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=43630

 

[Impetus]

Bread:

Nice story. A lot wasn't said, which I think worked for the story, rather than against it. Who they were and why they were together was left upto the reader to decide, and for me it let my mind run free inside the bounds you set up. I liked.

The sex was hot, and while the breadmaking wasn't the greatest tie-in i've ever seen paired with sex, it did play it's part, allowing you to play sex and dough off the other, leading to some interesting story elements. I thought it turned out well.

A short, but good story. Nice.

-I

 

[Impetus]

Storm:

Things I didn't like:
I don't think the framework set up by the horned god and the storm helped the atmosphere or the sex as much in this story as the bread did in the previous one. My best theory as to why is that the god was brought more to the fore this time, where itbecame a more important story element. But as a more important element, it required more explanation and time in story, which was not to be found this time.

The end of the story was also a bit of a letdown, not so much in that the 'all a dream?' angle is often used, more in that the last few lines did little to wrap up the story for me. Being 'Awake' just didn't seem to put a cap on the story.

Things I liked:
I really liked the tension and, dare I say, electricity that was present in this one and how you wrote about it. How the tension present in the air and the universe and everything throught the story. That certainly lent and air of mystery and tension to everything. It was described well.

The sex was also pretty top-notch, if not a bit shorter than I was expecting. Definitely arousing, which is, after all, the point.

All in all, a bit of a mixed bag. I think you may have tried to bring 'pagan' a little to far forward for the story to support.

-I

 

[c.fey]

Thanks, I, as always your comments are insightful and needed!!
You're GRRReat.

I do like Bread better than Storm and I guess it shows.

I do need to work on the pagan aspect in Storm; The Horned God is very important to me in my life in general; and I need to work on writing about him in such a way that doesn't assume that everyone knows what I am talking about; ie: the term 'awake' has a whole different connotation for me; as something similar happened to me. A bit far fetched but, if there are any Otherkin out there, they might understand.

Thanks again I, and of course I am most proud that my stories had the ....desired....affect on you.

Ta ~ fey