I'd appreciate feedback on my stories

[MsSeminoleWind]

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[damppanties]

Hi,

The red "H" speaks for itself and there are too many scattered about your memberpage already.

I chose to read Cherries/Cream for Lindsey. I liked the way it started but it lost momentum somewhere in the kitchen. One big drawback was that your paragraphs were too long. I just hate to read long bits of text. I'm sure it would help a lot if you separated the paragraphs into smaller ones.

I felt the dialogue was a little stiff. That's one area which I think you can do better.

Hope this helps. Keep writing.

 

[TabooTeller]

I'm aware, after the fact, that I have a few grammatical and spelling errors in my stories, due mainly to re-reading them so many times to "find" such errors, I guess. But I would appreciate more feedback on my actual stories. I want to thank those of you who have let me know what you think and those who have voted on my stories. I look forward to some constructive feedback from experienced readers and authors.



MsSeminoleWind's Page

Boy I rejoiced when I saw you had a sequel to "Accidental Fantasy". To bad I am to busy to read it all right now. I did save it so I can read it. I did skim through parts of it, looks like it has one section I was hoping for but it also looks like they are becoming full fledge swappers which I am not too sure about. It also looks like you left it open for a third one. I wil rad it and send you my comments. As to your grammaitcal and spelling arrors. I probably won't be too much help with those. If you read my story You will see why.

TabooTeller
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