I wrote what turns me on

[daggett]

Hi folks, I've just had my third story posted here. It's in the Loving Wives category and I'm getting pecked to death already. I happen to like the wife-sharing fantasy, (intentional emphasis on fantasy), but some folks just don't understand the fantasy/fiction aspect of this.

I'd like to get some feedback about how the story is written and any other comments that might make any future stories better.

Thanks for taking a look. http://english.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=216405

 

[elfin_odalisque]

Hi folks, I've just had my third story posted here. It's in the Loving Wives category and I'm getting pecked to death already. I happen to like the wife-sharing fantasy, (intentional emphasis on fantasy), but some folks just don't understand the fantasy/fiction aspect of this.

I'd like to get some feedback about how the story is written and any other comments that might make any future stories better.

Thanks for taking a look. http://english.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=216405

Hi daggett, just read your story and I think it's good. In Loving Wives there are strong and deeply felt views. Half of the readers/commentators are men who cannot accept any wife-sharing. The other half are men with a fanatasy of sharing their wives. I make no judgement other than to say you rarely see women commenting in this category - doesn't that say it all?

From a story point of view, I must agree a bit with the comments that asked for more character development. I always want to empathise with someone in a narrative - a bit more background/explanation wouldn't go amiss.

For understandable reasons, this is a really difficult category - Good luck.