I would love to have your opinion!

[SugarCherry]

Hello! You may call me Sugar... or Cherry... or Sugar Cherry whatever.

Anyway I have recently registered to the site and am planning on contributing with a few stories, in fact I am working on one now! The thing about that is, I have a huge set up. My two characters met as children and as I was typing out my story in word I got to the second page and they are still innocent kiddies.

To me this is no problem. I think setting up makes the sexy part even sexier really... But for this site? I'm not so sure. I would like to have my story to be well voted for, should I edit and cut to the chase? Or is a developed plot appreciated even if it isn't sexy?

Thanks!

 

[StrangeLife]

Hello! You may call me Sugar... or Cherry... or Sugar Cherry whatever.

Anyway I have recently registered to the site and am planning on contributing with a few stories, in fact I am working on one now! The thing about that is, I have a huge set up. My two characters met as children and as I was typing out my story in word I got to the second page and they are still innocent kiddies.

To me this is no problem. I think setting up makes the sexy part even sexier really... But for this site? I'm not so sure. I would like to have my story to be well voted for, should I edit and cut to the chase? Or is a developed plot appreciated even if it isn't sexy?

Thanks!

Hey! You can't have my opinion - I need it myself.



Seriously though, it depends on what category you are aiming for. In some categories - like Novels and Novellas - there are many very long stories with complex plots. It also depends what audience you are catering to. Some people write "stroker stories" which are basically 90% sex while other authors write actual stories with an erotic angle. It sounds like you might be the latter type.

Either way you can be sure to find an appreciative audience for it. This is a pretty big place...

 

[Privates1stClass]

Welcome to the Author's Hangout.

Your story can't have any sexual activity going on between the characters until they are 18 years old. I hope you understand that--not on this site anyway.

 

[sr71plt]

Second page of Word? Probably not a problem if nothing sexual is happening with them (watching something sexual, is something sexual happening with them, by the way). Second Literotica page and you're still talking about innocent kiddies? Then you likely are posting your story to the wrong Web site.

 

[SugarCherry]

No, there is nothing sexual going on with them when they are children. This is what my question is about. Since I'm on my second page on word and nothing sexual has been going on I was wondering if the story would even be given a chance. Or if most audiences here would go well... I've read this far and nothing is happening so low rating onto the next.

 

[sr71plt]

No, there is nothing sexual going on with them when they are children. This is what my question is about. Since I'm on my second page on word and nothing sexual has been going on I was wondering if the story would even be given a chance. Or if most audiences here would go well... I've read this far and nothing is happening so low rating onto the next.

The audience here is huge and varied. I wouldn't be worried about pleasing everyone or even most. If you can write within the few restrictions they have here, I suggest you worry about the quality of the writing, not the wishes of the nonexistent "universal" reader.

 

[Bramblethorn]

No, there is nothing sexual going on with them when they are children. This is what my question is about. Since I'm on my second page on word and nothing sexual has been going on I was wondering if the story would even be given a chance. Or if most audiences here would go well... I've read this far and nothing is happening so low rating onto the next.

Like SR said, write what you want to write, don't lose sleep about whether it's going to appeal to everybody. When posting the story, you might want to use the Notes field to say that everybody's over 18 before anything sexual happens, just to avoid accidental rejection.

 

[PennLady]

No, there is nothing sexual going on with them when they are children. This is what my question is about. Since I'm on my second page on word and nothing sexual has been going on I was wondering if the story would even be given a chance. Or if most audiences here would go well... I've read this far and nothing is happening so low rating onto the next.

To echo SR71, there are tons of people who read stories on this site, and you'll never appeal to all of them, and you shouldn't try. There isn't really such a thing as "most audiences." If writing this part of the story is important to the overall story, then include it.

It seems for a lot of us, three Word pages equals about one Lit screen page, give or take. (A screen page is about 3400 words.) So while you're still on the kid part on Word page 2, you're not even halfway down the page for a posted story.

 

[Hypoxia]

In addition to the fine suggestions above, I'll mention category. Placement can be critical for user response. Readers in the Mature and Romance categories seem to be patient; they can wait quite a while for sex! Even one of the top-rated Group Sex series (The Last Boy Scout) has zero sex in the first of its four chapters IIRC. Yes, preface the story with an Author's Note that 1) everyone having sex is at least 18 and 2) there's a long, slow buildup before the sex. You don't NEED to start a story with wild fucking (although that can be fun). Long, well-written stories can survive quite well with delayed gratification.

 

[SikFuk]

It doesn't matter how long it is, as long as it's interesting. A little conflict - or comic relief - helps to keep your reader guessing what's going to happen next. With no conflict, you're just reciting history, which may be interesting to you, but may be boring the hell out of the reader.

 

[49greg]

As others have said, there's all kinds of readers, you just need to make sure it's interesting enough to keep your audience. Remember that you get about 3400 words more or less to fill a Lit page.

You may well get comments about how long it takes to get to a sex scene, don't worry about them, especially if you've warned them about it at the beginning.

As has been mentioned, different categories draw different kinds of readers, and some also draw more readers than others. Enjoy writing, submit your story and you'll get a great thrill seeing it posted. You'll have fun counting votes, views and comments.

Then write your next one.

Good Luck!

 

[jacktar48]

You might use a flash-back to make sure people know the sex is out there.

Start off with a brief but hot scene in which they're about to DO IT for the first time, then they start remembering their benighted childhood and who ever would have thought...

 

[JAMESBJOHNSON]

Go for the corn flakes as most do.

In Vietnam we ate fried hamburger patties (with the cold gray gelatinous fat) every meal for a year. Plus lime Koolaid. LIT is like that. LIT is like the double-knit polyester radio station in Rantoul Illinois that plays the same tunes by Debby Boone, Barry Manilow, the Cowsills, Carpenters, and Jackson 5 all the time.

 

[SugarCherry]

You've all helped me out a lot. Thank you very much.

 

[soflabbwlvr]

The short answer is that you put the sex where it belongs. Where is that? Where ever it fits best in the flow of your story. My personal opinion is that I prefer stories where there is a build up to the sex. Let the reader get invested in the characters, create a context for the coupling, become interested in their fate before they do the deed. Sex should be the climax, not the prelude. But that's just me.

My concern with your story is that a piece spending too much time detailing the non-sexual adventures of children is going to have readers clicking out rather quickly. This is an adult story site, and while the presence of children is not forbidden, lingering too long on that part of the back story will make some readers uncomfortable and others wondering why it is posted on an erotic site. I think that more than a paragraph or too devoted to a childhood background could be problematic.

I think you should ask yourself just how much is truly necessary? Can you cut it down, summarize it in a paragraph and then jump to their adult selves. Develop the rest of the story through the adult versions. That's my opinion.

 

[StrangeLife]

Btw. SugarCherry - please drop a link to the story when it has been put up. It's always interesting to check out a new author, so I will be looking forward to it.

 

[msgrant67]

Tell the story your way

No, there is nothing sexual going on with them when they are children. This is what my question is about. Since I'm on my second page on word and nothing sexual has been going on I was wondering if the story would even be given a chance. Or if most audiences here would go well... I've read this far and nothing is happening so low rating onto the next.

There are readers who will like it and readers who will dislike it either way.
Personally, I like the build up, and usually include at least some, and most of the time I receive feedback from some who say there was too much build up.
I do get more positive feedback than negative though.

So, tell the story that you want to tell, and don't worry about scores and ratings.
Some of my favorite stories are rated lower than stories that I wrote as quick on offs.

Good luck