I Will by REDWAVE

[daughter]

If you like a little grit in your erotica, check out REDWAVE. Red provides an alternative to the usual romantic, syrupy, or humorous fare we often associate with poetry.

I enjoy "I will" because it's honest, biting. Clearly, the writer doesn't take himself too seriously. He is serious about questioning superficial political correctness. Definite interest in social commentary. You might not agree with him, but he doesn't care. He's more interested in provoking some contemplation. That's a good thing.

RED knows I believe in paring. If a word or phrase doesn't deliver bang for the buck, I'm likely to snip it. No exception here. I'd scale some and re-think some line breaks, but overall the tone, pace and delivery were solid.

Thanks for the read, RED. Check it out folks:

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=24616

Peace,

daughter

 

[REDWAVE]

Thanks

Thanks, daughter. You know I'm a big fan of your writing, too. Interestingly, the poem of mine which has been getting the most reads lately is "A Lover's Lament," which is non-erotic.

Anyway, daughter, when the heck are you going to get yourself an avatar? (A nude photo of yourself would do just fine.)

 

[daughter]

Now I done told you once

Sista don't play that way. My guy is burly, rough and damn possessive. These tits is for his eyes only! LOL

Can't blame you for being curious though. I tell you this:

no chips, whole potatoes

bold, broad-backed
busy sista
sassy mouth and bounce
all business
no sunshine blowing
up your backside
style.


Peace,

d

 

[REDWAVE]

"Curses! Foiled again!"

O, well-- hey, you can't blame me for trying. You should get some kind of avatar, anyway. Heck, you could post a clothed picture of yourself, or whatever. You could even post a nude pic of some other chick and say it was you-- who'd know the difference?

 

[daughter]

will do friend

RED--

You crack me up! I told my sweetie about your request. He feigned a grumble then offered to help me find an avatar. LOL

One erotic image coming up. I prefer black&white, artistic stuff so don't get your hopes up.

Peace,

daughter

 

[REDWAVE]

OK

B&W, artistic stuff sounds good. I look forward to seeing what kind of image you use to define yourself.