I want your opinion.

[JADED_ONE1969]

I have been 'writing' on this site for about a year on and off. I have never called myself a 'writer' and never will. I am just someone who puts words on a screen and if someone, anyone likes it then I am content. I have reached the point in my stories where I want to improve the writing. I have had some great help from various people a long the way. But I still doubt myself.

I am at the point of stopping writing simply because I don't feel I am doing them or the readers justice.

Now I am sure nobody knows who I am or cares and I am sure they will tell me so. But what I would like is some constructive opinions about if I should stay and continue 'writing' or give it up as a bad job.

Let me know what you think good or bad. if anyone would like to read any of my stories. I am afraid I have no idea how to do a link to them-someday I might learn- But if anyone is interested look on the writers index on page 87 I think, or just look on the new stories index I have a couple that are on pages 5 and 6.

If again anyone cares my stories tend to be about romantic ideals. I don't write non-consent and I don't write incest. most of my stories are in non-erotic, romance, exhibitonist and letter and transcript. I used to write in loving wives but don't see any point to that catorgory. I didn't see any loving wives in it at all. so I leave that to other people.

Thank you for your time.

If of course you dont really care either way. Thats okay, just don't bother leaving a messege.

On the other hand if you want to rant and rave at me for all the stupid comments I have left then please do so.

Regards

GW66

 

[hmmnmm]

sounds like you're going through a Writer's Funk that seems to follow some writers around like a cloud. I'm well acquainted with it. We engage in conflict just about every day. Sometimes it wins, sometimes I win, sometimes it's a draw. I understand the despondency. Everyone is given a demon. Different demons are assigned different souls. The Why the Fuck Do I Bother Demon is apparently yours. I recognize it because a demon of the same genus was apparently assigned to me.

So what to do about it? Only one thing I know of, and that is to know when to engage it, or sometimes when to fall back. These are no simple feats we attempt. It can't be easy. Who would want it to be easy? Where would the fun be if it was easier? Hey, I've been knocking around here for nearly four years and often feel I'm just not connecting. It does tend to be frustrating, unless I just get cool with the fact that it won't happen. That's the way the world goes. Believe me, I know the feeling.

But you and I, deep down we know we can't quit. So, accept that fact right away and...

You'll be alright. Keep at it. You really have no other choice.

 

[Guest]

Here's a link to your Stories page:

http://www.literotica.com/stories/memberpage.php?uid=870458&page=submissions

I had a quick look around some of your stories, but I won't say I've read them in-depth. For what it's worth, here are a few thoughts:

Judging by your style, I don't think you had formal training in writing fiction or much experience with it before you began posting on Lit; if those are true, you're actually not doing too badly. There are far worse stories around.

I'd also guess that you've not worked with an editor or a proofreader, based on the grammatical mistakes which, while again by no means the worst I've seen, are severe enough to bother me as I read. Having your manuscript gone over by either an editor or a proofreader would help.

You're making an effort at character development; unless you have a natural gift for it, that's something that only comes with experience, feedback, and rewriting again and again. For instance, in the opening of "Gary & Catherine Chaper 01," you write:

Katherine had just stepped out of the shower and was dripping wet. She looked at her husband who was sleeping, stretched out on top of the sheets. She thought about having some fun waking him up. So standing in front of him naked, she slowly crept up the bed on all fours allowing the water to drip on to his body until her pussy was close to his face.

In Chapter 2, though:

After the previous night of showing off her body to the people at the party, she had no problem displaying her body to her husband.

(Of course, she apparently had no problem before.)

OK, now for the "bad" news:

I find your writing rather flat and lifeless; before you commit hari-kiri, hear me out.

Taking "Gary and Catherine" as an example, the extent of exhibitionism you've incorporated is very small by Lit standards and is unlikely to please readers of the E & V category. Still, you have the makings of a story, and your sex scenes aren't bad; however, your punctuation is making your dialogue stilted and unnatural.

Consider this example:

"Well it would be nice. After all it is nice outside. And I want you to feel comfortable with whom you are. And what most men and women for that matter think of you. But I will never force you to do anything you do not want to do. Secondly those guidelines you mentioned last night? Well number one is no one apart from me will touch you, okay?"

If you read this aloud, exactly as it's written, it comes out as a monotone. That's because people put in pauses, and hesitations, and inflections that have to be conveyed by punctuation, since the reader can't actually hear what's being said.

Here's how it looks with punctuation and a few bobbles corrected. (People use a LOT of contractions when they talk.) Read it aloud, or have someone else read it so you can hear the difference:

Well, it'd be nice. After all, it is nice outside. And I want you to feel comfortable with who you are and with what most men and women, for that matter, think of you. But I will never force you to do anything you don't want to do. Secondly, those guidelines you mentioned last night? Well, number one is that no one apart from me will touch you. Okay?"

OK, long story short: I think you show promise, but you need to either read very well-written work closely to see the how yours differs, or you need to work with an editor. Of course, that's just one person's opinion.