I want that one

[cumnchat]

Douglas Emerson loved the game that he got his minions to play for him. They trawled all the areas where there were young beautiful girls and they would take photos and videos to bring back for him to browse, when he saw a girl he wanted they would hunt her down and then send an innocent looking invitation to a party at his nightclub where they would be introduced to him. From then on it was up to him to seduce them, if successful the girl never wanted for anything again except the freedom to continue her original life. Those that refused him, well the least said the better.

 

[Sean Renaud]

That's an. . .interestingly dark tale. I guess you need to flesh out this baddie a bit more because as it stands he's just petty. I mean fun third rate Batman villian petty where his motivations don't really so much make sense as we always assume a real villain pushed them out the door.

 

[Hypoxia]

How do you want the story to end? Does he continue his shit forever, or receive his just punishment, or lead into even deeper shit (he's a front for supreme evil), or what?

 

[cumnchat]

I must admit I haven't thought any further than what I have already stated, I would welcome some constructive ideas though.

 

[Sean Renaud]

Given that I'm a fan of stories where the bad guy wins this is a story where the bad guy absolutely has to lose. Ideally to a woman or women of some combination of he was successful and not.

 

[cumnchat]

I tend to agree with you on that SR, he is a real bad ass villain and has to get his comeuppance but only after a trail of distressed but satisfied women have passed through his hands. His one redeeming feature though is that he takes care of all the women who succumb to him. I'm thinking along the lines of perhaps an undercover female cop becomes entangled with him and falls for him , knowing she should do the right thing and close him down but is torn.

 

[Sean Renaud]

Except that's only barely a redeeming feature. I think you're better off with some how one of the women he takes care of being in some sort of relationship (sister, friend, coworker, friend of a friend doesn't matter) with one of his victims and people sorting it out. IF he continually uses the same club it's only a matter of time before someone knows someone else.

 

[cumnchat]

Again, ALL ideas are welcome, I intend to give this a lot of thought before throwing it out there to everyone. I am sure the basic idea is sound but the details are so important.

 

[JaxRhapsody]

This reminds me of the story I'm writing, called; Stolkholm, about a guy who kidnaps a college student, and...well...spoilers aside, stolkholm syndrome sets in...

 

[lovecraft68]

I'll volunteer to write the part where he gets his.

Sean can vouch for my credentials on the matter.