I want feedback on this sensual poem please!:)

[tigerjen]

I am looking for feedback on this one poem of mine,
"Venus in Pisces".

Here is the link:
http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=23543

If for some reason the link doesn't work, just copy and paste
it to the web browser.....

I look forward to feedback and votes!

Thank you!

Tigerjen

 

[White Crane]

She gave you a gift that shows in your writing.

Last stanza took me a minute to figure out what you were talking about.

 

[tigerjen]

Thank you!

Thank you for the lovely comment!
Very sweet of you!

tigerjen

 

[teniellejd]

A nice poem

Your poem was really good, I'll take a look at some of your other ones. Thanks.

 

[tigerjen]

thank you!

teniellejd......

Thank you for reading "Venus in Pisces"! I look forward
to feedback from you in the future in regards to my
other erotic poetry......here is a quick link to my
writings for 'easy access':

http://www.literotica.com/stories/memberpage.php?uid=39113

I look forward to hearing from you again, feedback and votes....
Thank you again!

Tigerjen