I need just 3 more votes

[smoulderin]

I need just 3 more votes to see where I can be on Lit for standings, I'll be submitting more stories so it would be nice to see what you all think of my writing.http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=34531

 

[TheWriter]

You must have had a nightmare with grammar. Anyway, I voted, and my comments are in you email.

 

[sxyladyUK]

Hi
Well i read your story, and voted...may i now be so bold as to give you my opinion....it being just that...just my thoughts so dont take them to heart..
The idea was good, and i could relate to it, but for me there were too many mmms, and it was a little rushed ...almost like a cybersex conversation, rather than an erotic story...
But, hey what do i know...keep up the good work and feel free to read/criticise mine.....only way to improve ya know

luv sexylady xx

 

[smoulderin]

Thank you for your feedback.
Yes it was rushed, I had to get it done without my hubby finding out before it was posted. And we both work at home so it was kinda tricky. I did do my job though we was very aroused after he read it.
Thank you for your votes.
I am working on another story now, it should be done soon.

 

[WickedEve]

smmmoulderin

I've used my share of "mmmm's" and "ohhhh's" and "ahhhh, yes, FUCK me's". lol But my lover receives these "mmm-drenched" stories. I don't submit them. Maybe you could, first, give stories like A Promise For You My Sweet to your hubby, and then after he's enjoyed it, you can polish the story for submission.
And here's a good place for writing tips: Writer's Resourceshttp://www.literotica.com/storyxs/writ_stor.shtml