I need help with writing an erotic story

[ILOVEMYSISTER]

can any1 help

 

[Slutlet]

Hi

I'll help.

Who is the story about?

Who tells it?

What happens ( briefly ) ?

Where does it happen ?

Why does it happen ?

Let me know. Hey it sounds interesting already !



your little sister

 

[ILOVEMYSISTER]

hi Slutlet

Hey how are you?

Well my story?, ok if your still interested here are the answers to your questions in the order that u asked them:


1. Its about me and my 18 year old sister Yvonne.

2. You can be the narrator if you want to be

3. Well Yvonne is crying because she is dumped by her latest bf through the telephone, and she is devastated as he tells her that he doesnt love her, and i comfort her by telling her that everything is ok that she is with somebody who loves her very much so and thinks she looks really sexy in her short denim skirt.
So I start seducing her by kissing her lips gently and running my fingers through her short and straight blonde hair, telling her that i have wanted to fuck her for ages, she tells me that she likes me kissing and that it turns her on and that im to take her to bed to fuck her real good.

Firstly the living room, then it ends up in my bedroom

Because i do love her, and i cant stop thinking about her and she really turns me on when she wears a short skirt, because she has a gorgoeus figure and looks really sexy in them.

 

[Slutlet]

nasty, nasty, nasty. I love it !

What does your sister look like though ? Do you think she'd agree to fuck you straight away? And where are your mom and dad ?

 

[Flashlight7.5]

Believability

Granted, this is a porn story, but if you jump from "Hey, sis, I love you. You're a great person" to "Hey, sis, you look damn sexy in a short skirt. Let's fuck." within the space of a couple paragraphs, your story will come off as laughable.

You need to build the tension if you want the story to work.

Also, make sure your story has a beginning, middle, and end.

 

[Slutlet]

Flashlight's right. Check out the stories on the story board, they all start with a bit of an introduction to character and place.

Why don't you write:

one paragraph outlining what your current relationship's like

one paragraph describing what she looks like, what she likes to wear

one paragraph describing you finding her crying, and figuring out why

one paragraph describing how you start to comfort her, in a regular fraternal way

after that, things can start to get more interesting ! I don't really have time to narrate this for you, but I'll read what you write and make suggestions if you like.

 

[ILOVEMYSISTER]

to slutlet and flashlight

hey guys

thanks for the replys, but thats just it, i can never but a long story together, i only have ever ideas, i dont know how to phrase them to put them into an erotic story to make it sexy, and when i say sexy i mean for the reader to like it, to continue reading it and say this is good stuff even if it is incest, rather than this is boring, im going to another forum.

btw, just one last thing where will i find the story board

 

[Flashlight7.5]

Look down

If you scroll down to the bottom of this page, you will find a link for "Story Index." Click and enjoy.