i need an editor plese

[BraOnMe23]

if you could edit this for spelling, gramer, tellme your coments, that would be grate
Jessica – Is about 18 with a c-cup breast and a shaven pussy
Erek - 20 vary rich and have a 5inch to 6inch cock

(12/20/06, Jessica)
It all started at Erek's house when he decide to though a party at his log cabin. Eric was the richest guy on campus accompanied by his richness was his 6-pack abs and 6in of cock, every girl wanted him. And Jessica was no different, she knew about the party and went knowing that it would be fun, and possibly lead to getting Erek alone, she wanted to talk to him, to see what he was like before she just gave her virginity away. So went home to change, she looked at her closet in discus, nothing she had would attract him to her, all of her closes were lose fitting, and she knew guys liked them tight. So she went shopping,

(12/20/06, Erek)
Erek, sat down thinking, “ how am I going to find the one? I know I could have any girl of my pick, but I want some one who likes me for me”. “ I got it I’ll though a party, and the one girl that doesn’t come up to me, she be the one I go out with next” so with that Erek, got invitations, and gave one to every one on campus. Then he came to Jessica, he handed her it, and as he looked at her, he could just tell, that she was the one.

(Later that day, Jessica) Jessica, went tough, a lot of stores, finding a halter top, that made her breast look like a d cup, and a skirt that was so tight that her ass was perfectly defined, and she bout a thong and bra, that she thought looked sexy under it. She took it home to change, she looked hot, at least that’s what a guy told her as she walked bye, but she was freezing in this whether, even with her heavy coat on over it. She then walked into the cabin, there were lights flashing and music blasting, she hung up her coat, and of cores there was Erek at the center of attention, there was no way, she would get him to talk to her. And than as if by fate there was an announcement on the radio “ winter storms are blowing, go home now carefully, before you get snowed in” then the people stared to swarm out to there cars, and go, Jessica had no way home, she had just walked hear. As every one had gone, it was just her and Erek, he came over to her and said

Erek: do you have a way home?
Jessica: no, I walked hear
Erek: I can take you back as long as the roads are ok
Dude on radio: we have just been advised that if you are not already on the roads to stay off team, conditions are worsening.
Erek: well, it looks as if you’ll have to stay hear for the night

Erek hadn’t recognized her, she had changed her look that much, but she stayed, hoping to talk with him.
Erek: you want to watch a movie? It will help pass the time
Jessica: sure
So Erek got out the pop corn and put in a film but they didn’t which it, they mostly talked trough it, as it became latter, he looked into her eyes, he could tell they where the same as the one’s, he snuggled next to her, she was loving every moment, all the time the sat there, she new she wanted him to be her first, but how, she started to sway her butt so that it rubbed across his crouch, sure enough, he started to become hard. He started to move away, and she let him, and there it was right in front of her, his harden cock,
Jessica: did I do that?
Erek: yes
Jessica: I’m sorry, it’s just I never seen one before
Erek: so you’re a virgin?
Jessica: yeah, I’m sorry for making you erect
Erek: it’s ok, I’ll teach you
Jessica, you will?
Erek: yeah, just take off my pants, and suck my cock, she did as she was instructed, Erek couldn’t believe how good she was, she was making him harder, and being able to see that her breast, jigged wile she worked on is cock, as she came up for air he pulled her up
Jessica: I wasn’t done, (looking down, felling it with her left hand) oh it seams I have only made you harder,
Erek: (he takes off her top, and then her bra) it looks like I have made you hard also, (he starts to play with her nipples) Jessica felt so good as his hands touched her breast, she then got this felling in side her, as this wave went though her, she came for the first time, it felt good, so good she couldn’t wait to have his cock in her, she took off her skirt and panties, so that they were now both completely naked, she begin t kiss him, and then he stopped
Erek: what was that for?
Jessica: look down
Erek looked down, and there was her come running from her pussy
Jessica: you made me come
Erek: ok, so know what?
Jessica: Erek, I want you to fuck me
Erek: you sure?
(As to answer she lied down and guided his cock into her pussy, so he put all of him into his first drive, in order to brake her flower, she yelled in pain, but as he continued to fuck her it became more enjoyable, she stated to feel the wave of energy, again, she was going to come
Jessica: I’m coming
Having her come sent Erek over the edge as he came in to her pussy, she cold feel every drop of his seed, it felt good to have it in her, she couldn’t wait tell net time

 

[snooper]

i need an editor plese

if you could edit this for spelling, gramer, tellme your coments, that would be grate
Jessica – Is about 18 with a c-cup breast and a shaven pussy
Erek - 20 vary rich and have a 5inch to 6inch cock

I'll start you off:

i Use a capital letter to start a sentence, and for the first person personal pronoun anywhere need an editor plese Should be spelled "please"

if Use a capital letter to start a sentence you could edit this for spelling, gramer Should be spelled "grammar" , tellme Should be two words "tell me" your coments Should be spelled "comments", that would be grate Should be spelled "great" and you need a full stop (period) here
Jessica – Is about 18 with a c-cup breast and a shaven pussy You need a full stop (period) here
Erek - 20 vary Should be spelled "very" rich and have Should be spelled "has" because the subject is singular a 5inch to 6inch cock You need a full stop (period) here

Finally your posting start as I think it should be:
I need an editor please

If you could edit this for spelling, grammar, tell me your comments, that would be great.
Jessica – Is about 18 with a c-cup breast and a shaven pussy.
Erek - 20 very rich and has a 5inch to 6inch cock.

That's as much as I'm prepared to do, and I may have missed something in this ultra-fast edit.

 

[drksideofthemoon]

I'm not an editor...but...the words that are highlighted are spelling errors.

Jessica, went tough, a lot of stores, finding a halter top, that made her breast look like a d cup, and a skirt that was so tight that her ass was perfectly defined, and she bout a thong and bra, that she thought looked sexy under it. She took it home to change, she looked hot, at least that’s what a guy told her as she walked bye, but she was freezing in this whether, even with her heavy coat on over it. She then walked into the cabin, there were lights flashing and music blasting, she hung up her coat, and of cores there was Erek at the center of attention, there was no way, she would get him to talk to her. And than as if by fate there was an announcement on the radio “ winter storms are blowing, go home now carefully, before you get snowed in” then the people stared to swarm out to there cars, and go, Jessica had no way home, she had just walked hear. As every one had gone, it was just her and Erek, he came over to her and said

This paragraph is a disaster. Here's how it should look.

Jessica went through a lot of stores and found a halter top that made her breasts look larger, and a tight skirt that highlighted her ass. She also bought a bra and a thong that would look hot under the skirt and top.

I have a problem with the next bit. How is a guy going to know she looks hot if she is wearing a heavy coat?

She walked into the cabin and hung up her coat. The music was blasting and the lights were flashing. Of course, Erek was the center of attention and there was no way she could get him to talk to him.

Then, as if by fate, there was an announcement on the radio advising of a severe winter storm moving in.

Jessica was left along with Erek after everyone had abruptly left the party. He walked over to her and said...

I wish I could find something positive to say. It reads like a twelve year old wrote it.

 

[palisa]

You might want to consider dictating to someone who can write English, and then have it edited.

 

[lonelybbw]

looking for some help. hi i started to write a story in march. i have 5 chapters done, but for the life of me i cant remember how to punctuate. i can send the chapters via email if someone would help me

thanks so much in advance
j

You might want to consider dictating to someone who can write English, and then have it edited.

 

[AsylumSeeker]

If...

If the story was compelling but just needed polishing, I'd be willing to invest a bit of time reviving it. But your story would require quite a bit of time to mold, and would still, in my opinion, be lacking.

I normally encourage people to write, but the language difference may be too great to account for. If you still want to write, read more.

Sorry, this is probably not the response you're looking for.

if you could edit this for spelling, gramer, tellme your coments, that would be grate
Jessica – Is about 18 with a c-cup breast and a shaven pussy
Erek - 20 vary rich and have a 5inch to 6inch cock

(12/20/06, Jessica)
It all started at Erek's house when he decide to though a party at his log cabin. Eric was the richest guy on campus accompanied by his richness was his 6-pack abs and 6in of cock, every girl wanted him. And Jessica was no different, she knew about the party and went knowing that it would be fun, and possibly lead to getting Erek alone, she wanted to talk to him, to see what he was like before she just gave her virginity away. So went home to change, she looked at her closet in discus, nothing she had would attract him to her, all of her closes were lose fitting, and she knew guys liked them tight. So she went shopping,

(12/20/06, Erek)
Erek, sat down thinking, “ how am I going to find the one? I know I could have any girl of my pick, but I want some one who likes me for me”. “ I got it I’ll though a party, and the one girl that doesn’t come up to me, she be the one I go out with next” so with that Erek, got invitations, and gave one to every one on campus. Then he came to Jessica, he handed her it, and as he looked at her, he could just tell, that she was the one.

(Later that day, Jessica) Jessica, went tough, a lot of stores, finding a halter top, that made her breast look like a d cup, and a skirt that was so tight that her ass was perfectly defined, and she bout a thong and bra, that she thought looked sexy under it. She took it home to change, she looked hot, at least that’s what a guy told her as she walked bye, but she was freezing in this whether, even with her heavy coat on over it. She then walked into the cabin, there were lights flashing and music blasting, she hung up her coat, and of cores there was Erek at the center of attention, there was no way, she would get him to talk to her. And than as if by fate there was an announcement on the radio “ winter storms are blowing, go home now carefully, before you get snowed in” then the people stared to swarm out to there cars, and go, Jessica had no way home, she had just walked hear. As every one had gone, it was just her and Erek, he came over to her and said

Erek: do you have a way home?
Jessica: no, I walked hear
Erek: I can take you back as long as the roads are ok
Dude on radio: we have just been advised that if you are not already on the roads to stay off team, conditions are worsening.
Erek: well, it looks as if you’ll have to stay hear for the night

Erek hadn’t recognized her, she had changed her look that much, but she stayed, hoping to talk with him.
Erek: you want to watch a movie? It will help pass the time
Jessica: sure
So Erek got out the pop corn and put in a film but they didn’t which it, they mostly talked trough it, as it became latter, he looked into her eyes, he could tell they where the same as the one’s, he snuggled next to her, she was loving every moment, all the time the sat there, she new she wanted him to be her first, but how, she started to sway her butt so that it rubbed across his crouch, sure enough, he started to become hard. He started to move away, and she let him, and there it was right in front of her, his harden cock,
Jessica: did I do that?
Erek: yes
Jessica: I’m sorry, it’s just I never seen one before
Erek: so you’re a virgin?
Jessica: yeah, I’m sorry for making you erect
Erek: it’s ok, I’ll teach you
Jessica, you will?
Erek: yeah, just take off my pants, and suck my cock, she did as she was instructed, Erek couldn’t believe how good she was, she was making him harder, and being able to see that her breast, jigged wile she worked on is cock, as she came up for air he pulled her up
Jessica: I wasn’t done, (looking down, felling it with her left hand) oh it seams I have only made you harder,
Erek: (he takes off her top, and then her bra) it looks like I have made you hard also, (he starts to play with her nipples) Jessica felt so good as his hands touched her breast, she then got this felling in side her, as this wave went though her, she came for the first time, it felt good, so good she couldn’t wait to have his cock in her, she took off her skirt and panties, so that they were now both completely naked, she begin t kiss him, and then he stopped
Erek: what was that for?
Jessica: look down
Erek looked down, and there was her come running from her pussy
Jessica: you made me come
Erek: ok, so know what?
Jessica: Erek, I want you to fuck me
Erek: you sure?
(As to answer she lied down and guided his cock into her pussy, so he put all of him into his first drive, in order to brake her flower, she yelled in pain, but as he continued to fuck her it became more enjoyable, she stated to feel the wave of energy, again, she was going to come
Jessica: I’m coming
Having her come sent Erek over the edge as he came in to her pussy, she cold feel every drop of his seed, it felt good to have it in her, she couldn’t wait tell net time