I need a little help

[rgraham666]

I've got a new e-book in progress. I bundled all the romances I did here at Lit into an anthology.

Among them is my story Fatima.

I'm working on the edits and my editor keeps harping on the fact that the central character's emotions are unmotivated, that what she's feeling in not believable.

I don't see it myself. But I wouldn't.

So I'm asking any of you that remember the story, is this true? Are Fatima's emotions and actions not well motivated?

I'm getting to feel that in order to meet my editors demands I'm going to have to completely rewrite the story. I'm not sure I'm willing to spend the time to do that.

Help me out here, please?

 

[xssve]

Where's the story? It doesn't appear on your works page under the title Fatima.

 

[rgraham666]

Where's the story? It doesn't appear on your works page under the title Fatima.

Sorry. I took it off of Lit when I sold it.

I know a lot of people hear read it when it was here. I wanted their opinions.

Thanks.