I just inherited an editorship from Torg. Would like some feedback on the story.

[JBmanly50]

I've been writing threads on this story and it has just taken a life of it's own. so far I'm the only real author. The originator has long since disappeared and the Editor, Torg, just handed it over to me. Said he already had too much on his plate.

I'm interested in some feedback.

The story is Paint the town and this link takes you to the last thread.

This is the thread I really want feedback on because it is my first 'manage a trios' story and I thought it was pretty hot. But of course I'm biased and so I need some feedback to humble me a little, (or to expand my head til it bursts)

enjoy and don't forget to write.

thanks

JBmanly50

 

[Torg]

I've been writing threads on this story and it has just taken a life of it's own. so far I'm the only real author. The originator has long since disappeared and the Editor, Torg, just handed it over to me. Said he already had too much on his plate.

I'm interested in some feedback.

The story is Paint the town and this link takes you to the last thread.

This is the thread I really want feedback on because it is my first 'manage a trios' story and I thought it was pretty hot. But of course I'm biased and so I need some feedback to humble me a little, (or to expand my head til it bursts)

enjoy and don't forget to write.

thanks

JBmanly50

I like this thread a lot. Very hot. Your geometry (getting three bodies together is more complicated than two) seems to flow fine, and the female ejaculation is grand. Keep up the good work.

 

[JBmanly50]

I like this thread a lot. Very hot. Your geometry (getting three bodies together is more complicated than two) seems to flow fine, and the female ejaculation is grand. Keep up the good work.

Wooo hooo. Thanks Torg....and thanks for giving me the story. I would like to change some things about the first few threads and the POV.

 

[deathofcards]

Unless the original story creator has used the wrong POV such as classing the story as 1st person but writing in 3rd person, that I feel is something you should leave alone. The original POV that the author wanted should be maintained, by changing it you are in essence making it a completly new story away from it's creator's vision.

 

[amalgam]

Seven Inches Is The Average Length Of A Cock??!!

 

[amalgam]

Unless the original story creator has used the wrong POV such as classing the story as 1st person but writing in 3rd person, that I feel is something you should leave alone. The original POV that the author wanted should be maintained, by changing it you are in essence making it a completly new story away from it's creator's vision.

While I don't see any reason to worry about the original author's intent as POV goes, I do agree that it should be consistent, so I suggest changing it one way or the other way.

 

[JBmanly50]

Unless the original story creator has used the wrong POV such as classing the story as 1st person but writing in 3rd person, that I feel is something you should leave alone. The original POV that the author wanted should be maintained, by changing it you are in essence making it a completly new story away from it's creator's vision.

Part of the problem is that the original author has disappeared. I've tried to contact them with no success. 90 percent or more of this story is mine. I guess I could just start another story.

 

[artican]

Seven Inches Is The Average Length Of A Cock??!!

OMG! Where's the rest of it hiding?!

 

[artican]

Part of the problem is that the original author has disappeared. I've tried to contact them with no success. 90 percent or more of this story is mine. I guess I could just start another story.

Is it that you're having trouble adjusting to second person perspective? I only see the last two posts change to first person, it's easy enough to change them to second and continue one.