I have tried a new format...

[Cruel2BKind]

In my newest story, 'File 66' I have tried a new style. I really would like some critiquing as I haven't seen this style anywhere else on the site.

It is a gay male story, and it is told entirely throughout files on a computer. File 66 is the file filled with the events surrounding the capture, trial, and execution of a political prisoner. Like transcripts of the trial, interviews, statements, and a journal written by the prisoner. I would really like some feedback please!

Thanks.

http://www.literotica.com/s/file-66

 

[cocput]

I read the story. You are correct in one thing. I haven't seen anything like this fro a long while. I have read a book once, in which the story was told as diary entries.

The story is well told. By the time I finished page 3 in Lit, I was praying that the protagonist could get away.
Your portrayal of contrast between rape and love is wonderful.

It was nice to see that the plot had been kept alive while describing the hard times of prisoner's life. The notion, that Taylor was keeping his heart and will safe, is quite romantic.

I found the erotic content to be less juicy. I think you should attempt one more work in this style so that you become more comfortable in bringing those aspects alive.

The vile things are left in your PM.