I have a question.

[Kamilia Ross]

I'm sure somebody has probably asked before, but I have a question.
Entitled is helping me to write my first story but she's not on so I can't ask her.
I reached a point earlier today where there's a break in the story.
The characters have met, the scene is set, but one of them needs a couple of hours to do some preparation for that evening. How do you show that?
Thank you in advance.

 

[Guest]

I'm sure somebody has probably asked before, but I have a question.
Entitled is helping me to write my first story but she's not on so I can't ask her.
I reached a point earlier today where there's a break in the story.
The characters have met, the scene is set, but one of them needs a couple of hours to do some preparation for that evening. How do you show that?
Thank you in advance.

I'm not exactly certain what you mean.

Do you mean something in the story to mark passage of time, as in -

~

between paragraphs?

Or do you just mean discussing what is happening while the character is preparing?

 

[Kamilia Ross]

I'm not exactly certain what you mean.

Do you mean something in the story to mark passage of time, as in -

~

between paragraphs?

Or do you just mean discussing what is happening while the character is preparing?

I'm not sure myself.
I don't want to put in what they're doing. One is washing dishes and the other is braiding toilet paper.
LOL
What would be best to do instead of putting that in the story?

 

[Guest]

I'm not sure myself.
I don't want to put in what they're doing. One is washing dishes and the other is braiding toilet paper.
LOL
What would be best to do instead of putting that in the story?

You could refer in general language as to their activities.

Something about how they did - whatever - all the while anticipating, ya da ya da.

Braiding toilet paper???

 

[Kamilia Ross]

You could refer in general language as to their activities.

Something about how they did - whatever - all the while anticipating, ya da ya da.

Braiding toilet paper???

Yes. Braiding toilet paper.
It was entitled's idea.

 

[Guest]

Yes. Braiding toilet paper.
It was entitled's idea.

Ah. Toilet paper bondage.

You probably ought to mention that.

 

[Kamilia Ross]

Ah. Toilet paper bondage.

You probably ought to mention that.

OK.
I will.
Thank you!

 

[TheEarl]

I generally put in:

* * *

to signify a gap in time between passages of the story. It's one of the better options as it's pretty much guaranteed to play nicely with Lit's formatting system.

The Earl

 

[Guest]

................

 

[TheEarl]

I just play elevator music (~2 minutes per song)
or go:
LAALalalalalalalalallalalalallaaa.....lalalalalallaa

But, then again, it has been noted that you're more than a little odd.



The Earl

 

[Quiet_Cool]

I generally put in:

* * *

to signify a gap in time between passages of the story. It's one of the better options as it's pretty much guaranteed to play nicely with Lit's formatting system.

The Earl

Or perhaps just a simply statement of time passing.

"That night, after all the preparation, Angelina heard the gentle knock on the door and opened it with a nervous, anticipatory smile. She wondered, looking at the petite blonde girl before her, how things had become what they had. She had, afterall, spent a fair amount of the afternoon braiding toilet paper..."

Not good, but it was an on-the-spot kinda' thing.

Q_C

 

[Guest]

I just play elevator music (~2 minutes per song)
or go:
LAALalalalalalalalallalalalallaaa.....lalalalalallaa

I like the music idea.

 

[kendo1]

Angelina listened to the elevator music as she braided the toilet paper.

 

[Quiet_Cool]

Angelina listened to the elevator music as she braided the toilet paper.

Wondering ceaselessly if Lilly had finished washing the dishes and would be coming over soon...

Q_C

 

[Guest]

Wondering ceaselessly if Lilly had finished washing the dishes and would be coming over soon...

Q_C

And then - LAALalalalalalalalallalalalallaaa.....lalalalalallaa

 

[Quiet_Cool]

And then - LAALalalalalalalalallalalalallaaa.....lalalalalallaa

...and they all died.

The End

Q_C

 

[BlackShanglan]

...and they all died.

The End

Q_C

Good ending, but that opening needs some work.

 

[Quiet_Cool]

Good ending, but that opening needs some work.

It's only a first draft. We'll rewrite, then submit it for the Survivor contest, except... no one survived...

Q_C

 

[Guest]

It's only a first draft. We'll rewrite, then submit it for the Survivor contest, except... no one survived...

Q_C

They were all eaten by sharks.

You understand.

 

[Quiet_Cool]

They were all eaten by sharks.

You understand.

Of course. They might have swam to safety had their hands not been bound with braided toilet paper. That's what you call "ironic."

Q_C

 

[Guest]

Of course. They might have swam to safety had their hands not been bound with braided toilet paper. That's what you call "ironic."

Q_C

A useful literary tool.


(*snicker* I said - tool.)

 

[rgraham666]

I like the music idea.

I like sarahh's AV.

But I always do.

 

[entitled]

You dingbat! You know i'm still up and moving at that time of morning. Should have called me!

 

[Guest]

I like sarahh's AV.

But I always do.

 

[BlackShanglan]

They were all eaten by sharks.

You understand.

If only they'd had some dwarven bread.