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DVS

A ghost from your dreams
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This is a little something I wrote for someone about five years ago. She liked it, but ultimately she didn't like me. Figures. :rolleyes: Anyway, it isn't long enough to submit as a story, and it doesn't fit as a poem. So, I just thought I'd share it this way. Like it or not, that's up to you.


Submissive Control

He told her to strip naked, while he watched. She hesitated, embarrassed that he'd see everything she was wearing, but she slowly began by unbuttoning her pants. Slowly pushing down the zipper, she bent over, inching her jeans to the floor. She raised back up, revealing her slender legs. She stood there, feeling submissive with her jeans around her ankles, then she continued by removing her sweater.

Pulling it up and over her head she felt cool air against her midriff and her face grew flush as she visualized how she must look. Once the sweater had cleared her hair, she let it drop to the floor. She covered herself with her arms, submissive lust rushing through her. He snapped at her to continue, and the sound of his voice startled her out of her trance. She quickly reached back and unhooked her bra, letting it slide from her shoulders to the floor.

Again, her arms moved up to cover her nakedness. She felt vulnerable standing there with just white panties covering her body. She looked down at her clothes on the floor. Her sweater and bra discarded to the side and jeans still bunched around her ankles. Her last bit of modesty, white panties were all that remained between his eyes and her total nakedness. She knew they were damp and wondered if he could tell.

He reminded her that he was waiting and with trembling hands, she slowly pushed her panties down until they inched past her hips and dropped to the floor on their own. She stood in front of him, naked and shaking, a mixture of lust and fear made her body tingle. She kicked her jeans off and to the side, but he told her to pick her panties up. She was shocked when he told her to shove them into her mouth, for a little added humiliation. But, she did as she was told, submitting to whatever punishment he decided for her.

He pulled out a pair of metal handcuffs and she instinctively held her hands out for him to cuff them in front of her. He smiled and shook his head, then told her to turn around and put her hands behind her back. The look on her face was priceless, eyes wide with fear, but also full of lust, as she knew he will soon have complete control over her.

She turned around and he cuffed her wrists together. Silence filled the room as the ratchet of the cuffs closed on her wrists. The cold metal against the heat of her skin, caused her heart to beat even faster, because she knew there was no turning back. She was his. She turned around and presented herself to him. She could see the desire in his eyes as he inspected his captive. Such a wide range of thoughts went through her mind as she stood there, on display. She couldn't cover yourself, nor could she ask him for mercy.

Her pussy was dripping wet, and she trembled with anticipation of what was about to happen. He smiled when he saw her erect nipples. A sign of arousal within her. She couldn't conceal her feelings from him. She needed to feel controlled, to be punished, to be forced to reveal her every desire to him. Again she trembled, as she knew he would torment her body until it ached for release. He would use her desire against her, and her lust would be overpowering.

She would have no choice but to submit to everything he required of her. She could only hope he would eventually allow her satisfaction. She would be his willing little sex toy, performing for his pleasure, in a trance fueled by the fire within her.
 
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Classy! :rose:

Check your tenses-- the sentence "The look on your face is priceless" falls into present tense a couple of times." So sayeth thy editor ;)
 
I read because you were the author, DVS. :rose: (Normally I don't make it past the first paragraph of most stories written in second person.)

Nice.

p.s. I think "midrift" is one word.
 
Damn I am off to work soon no time to read it right now, but I will read this evening. :D

It's better read it when I am alone here anyways. :devil:
 
Classy! :rose:

Check your tenses-- the sentence "The look on your face is priceless" falls into present tense a couple of times." So sayeth thy editor ;)
It was all in first person present tense and I changed it. I didn't want it to seem too personal. This is why we have editors.
 
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I read because you were the author, DVS. :rose: (Normally I don't make it past the first paragraph of most stories written in second person.)

Nice.

p.s. I think "midrift" is one word.
I guess I should have left the POV as it was. Actually, third person is preferred by most readers. I sense another change coming on.

I tried midrift and spell check didn't like it. Maybe it's you Canadians? you never have your midriff exposed, do you?

Changing it to mid rift satisfied spell check, but as ImOnIt has added, I think it's midriff. Damn, I'm thinking of changing it to belly or torso...or navel area. :eek: Originally it was tits.
 
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I changed it to third person. Once I get it all glossed up, I'm going to submit it to the story section and constantly post the voting progress in this thread. Won't that be fun? :D :rolleyes:
 
Everything you write is hot and makes me want to grab my husband right now!

:D

:rose::rose::rose:
 
Yes, 'tis.

Mmmm, trifle.



Hot stuff DVS :) I'm going to save that if you don't mind, and show it to someone.
Seems you find trifle sexy? As for showing it to someone, I've changed it to third person. I hope it still works for you.
 
Everything you write is hot and makes me want to grab my husband right now!

:D

:rose::rose::rose:
Hmmm, whenever you comment on something of mine, it makes me hot...until you mention your husband. :rolleyes:
 
Hmmm, whenever you comment on something of mine, it makes me hot...until you mention your husband. :rolleyes:

He's my only hands on sex / kink provider though.

Last night I had sex with someone else, in my dreams. Damn it was hot!

LOL.

:devil:
 
He's my only hands on sex / kink provider though.

Last night I had sex with someone else, in my dreams. Damn it was hot!

LOL.

:devil:
Maybe I have hot dreams, too, but I don't ever remember them. A vitamin deficiency. :eek:
 
Hmmm, whenever you comment on something of mine, it makes me hot...until you mention your husband. :rolleyes:
*giggles*




Every time I read your stories I am busy with myself after lol. You have amazing way with words, your stories are just hot hot HOT. I would vote 100 for them if I could! :)

Glad you shared this one with us! *shivers*



Now I don't have any husband or anyone here. Not fair!!!! :(
 
That's such a shame.

*hug*

FF

:rose:
I don't see it that way. For the most part, I don't remember my dreams, but there are a few times when I will. It seems sometimes something I eat will trigger it.

But, those times are so few, I get my dream world mixed up with reality and I don't like that. I'd much rather not remember ANY of my dreams. I don't get confused quite as often that way. :eek:

By the way, vitamin B6 is the necessary vitamin to remember your dreams. I took B6 supplements in my 20s so I could remember my dreams and my dreams were pretty active. But once the confusion set in, I stopped. I know I dream at night...everybody dreams. But, I'm perfectly happy waking up and not remembering anything. :rolleyes:
 
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*giggles*




Every time I read your stories I am busy with myself after lol. You have amazing way with words, your stories are just hot hot HOT. I would vote 100 for them if I could! :)

Glad you shared this one with us! *shivers*



Now I don't have any husband or anyone here. Not fair!!!! :(
I'm glad you liked it. Save it for when you're with you now who. Then maybe he can benefit from your shivers, too. :D
 
Well mine is always busy and stressed so, when I said I wanted to grab him, that's exactly what I meant. Not that I would get to. Ugh.

*giggles*




Every time I read your stories I am busy with myself after lol. You have amazing way with words, your stories are just hot hot HOT. I would vote 100 for them if I could! :)

Glad you shared this one with us! *shivers*



Now I don't have any husband or anyone here. Not fair!!!! :(
 
I love, love, love dreams. Even the dreams I get killed in are fun. Okay, so there are some that are really nightmares and not adventure too. Sex dreams are soooo fun even if they are frustrating.

I take B-6 rarely, along with B-12, folic acid and iron when I feel run down. I am sure I don't get enough of these things most of the time though.

:rose:

I don't see it that way. For the most part, I don't remember my dreams, but there are a few times when I will. It seems sometimes something I eat will trigger it.

But, those times are so few, I get my dream world mixed up with reality and I don't like that. I'd much rather not remember ANY of my dreams. I don't get confused quite as often that way. :eek:

By the way, vitamin B6 is the necessary vitamin to remember your dreams. I took B6 supplements in my 20s so I could remember my dreams and my dreams were pretty active. But once the confusion set in, I stopped. I know I dream at night...everybody dreams. But, I'm perfectly happy waking up and not remembering anything. :rolleyes:
 
Seems you find trifle sexy? As for showing it to someone, I've changed it to third person. I hope it still works for you.

Oh, the concept as a whole, still works for me, first, second or third person.

:)
 
I felt like sharing

Okay, get the sheep firmly between your knees, that's it, just ignore the wriggling. Oh, yeah, watch your toes, they will do that. Now, take the comb...
 
So . . . I have to say I'm happy to see you writing. Was there a new inspiration we should know about?

:devil:
 
I'm glad you liked it. Save it for when you're with you now who. Then maybe he can benefit from your shivers, too. :D
hehe yea I am sure he would :)



Btw if you feel like sharing some more, something :eek: anything really :eek:, some of us wouldnt mind at all!! :D:D
 
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