Hyperchallenge

[Lauren Hynde]

Yes, it is about time we had another of these. A Same Title & Form Challenge. (STFC?)

First things first.


Q: What is a hypersonnet?
A: The Hynde Hypersonnet was created on 19th July 2002, in this very forum, and its first registered occurrence was Romeo is Bleeding, a cooperative effort by WickedEve, REDWAVE, JUDO, and myself.

The Hypersonnet is a freakish mutant fusion of the Classic and English Sonnets, and this 20 iambic pentameter extravaganza respects a very tight rhyming scheme:

ABBA CDDC CDE CDE ABBA EE.

As you can see, each of the five rhyming sounds appears four and only four times.


Q: So, what do we do with it?
A: You write one.

The title of your hypersonnet should start with Hyper, and finish with the neologism of your choice (or actual hyper- words or phrases, like Hypercritical, Hyperhydration, Hypertext or Hyperactive Imagination).

Your hypersonnets should be submitted on the 19th July, to be posted on the 20th, in honour of the 2nd Anniversary of this new and revolutionary form.

 

[perks]

you freak! wherever did you get this idea? *kicking ang*

 

[Lauren Hynde]

She was running out of forms.

 

[Lauren Hynde]

And looking at my signature, it looks like I just wasted a perfectly good title already.

 

[champagne1982]

And looking at my signature, it looks like I just wasted a perfectly good title already.

I'm in. There's a sucker born every minute...
Yep, every minute.

I'm claiming hyperbole... If anyone else uses this, I'll be so mad I'll explode!

 

[Lauren Hynde]

 

[perks]

I'm in. There's a sucker born every minute...
Yep, every minute.

I'm claiming hyperbole... If anyone else uses this, I'll be so mad I'll explode!

I just told eumenides on the phone, that I was using this one goddamnit!

grrrrrrr

 

[Lauren Hynde]

Technically, there's no reason why you can't all have it.

I only said I can't use Hyperbatic, but that's because I can't post two poems with the exact same title.

 

[perks]

Technically, there's no reason why you can't all have it.

I only said I can't use Hyperbatic, but that's because I can't post two poems with the exact same title.

well, I don't want her to exploooooode.

 

[Liar]

ABBA CDDC CDE CDE ABBA EE

This is just for rhymes, right?
Not those freaking evil repeated lines that make up villanelles and other such diabolic inventions, right?
Right?

If it's just the itsy bitsy detail (wait, what am I saying!?) of rhymes and iambic rhythm, I'm so in.

#L

 

[Lauren Hynde]

Yep, just rhyme and iambic pentameter.

 

[Liar]

Yep, just rhyme and iambic pentameter.

Bring it on!

 

[Angeline]

you freak! wherever did you get this idea? *kicking ang*

ow.



(sure Lauren, blame me--like you don't love this!)

es

 

[Lauren Hynde]

(sure Lauren, blame me--like you don't love this!)

 

[fawnie]

ok, i'm in, but someone tell me what iambic means..or must i go research it?

 

[fawnie]

ok, i'm in, but someone tell me what iambic means..or must i go research it?

bloody hell, it just means poetic rhyme?? i suppose iambic sounds more poetic

anyhow, i'm in on this challenge

 

[Lauren Hynde]

ok, i'm in, but someone tell me what iambic means..or must i go research it?

A long, long time ago, there was a poet here at Lit called UP, and back then they had something called a Poetry Bootcamp. In it, there was a lot of pertinent information on sonnets and their form, as well a great little gambit on Iambic Pentameter by UP. (The following is an excerpt).

Originally posted by Unmasked Poet - 1-22-1001 -
An Iamb is a two-syllable Foot with the stress placed on the 2nd syllable, as in "New York," or "above." Notice how the second syllable is stressed more than the first? You can find how words are accented in any dictionary, but it really shouldn't be necessary to go to such trouble; just say them out loud and listen. Often context determines which word or syllable is stressed in a foot, and you need to be aware of how your context might alter the stress in a particular foot. For example, in the sentence "I like your car," car would normally be stressed more than your. However, in "What do you mean your car?" the stress would be placed on your.

A Pentameter is a line of poetry constructed of 5 Feet, or units of rhythm. An Iambic Pentameter then is a line consisting of 5 Iambs, or two syllable Feet with the stress falling on the 2nd syllable of each foot.

Or you might say it is a 10-syllable line with the stresses beginning on the 2nd syllable and falling on every other syllable thereafter.

Here's an example, the first line of a sonnet by Edmund Spenser:
One day I wrote her name upon the strand,

Read this line aloud, and hopefully the rhythm will be apparent to you.

See, isn't that clear? Well, if you're like me, you might like the following example:

A line of iambic pentameter:
ta-DUH ta-DUH ta-DUH ta-DUH ta-DUH

If you're still having any trouble with it, we can turn this into a Iambic Workshop for the duration of the challenge.

 

[Lauren Hynde]

bloody hell, it just means poetic rhyme?

You wish!

But you're in now, no way to back down.

 

[fawnie]

You wish!

But you're in now, no way to back down.

this actually is very clear..i get it now, and believe it or not..this baby's right up my skirt!!

notta chance i'd wimp out..and thanks for the lesson!

 

[fawnie]

hyper plasmic love (a practice run)

~~~~~~
it stings me like a frost, a freeze of years,
so bold it stands, without a need to mend
it's said that time, is now to me my friend,
how long new love, be lost within my fears?

to say I need, is much to strong a word,
but truth be told my life now feels in vain
escape relents, I yield my life to pain,
forget the facts, and all the things i've heard.

forever love, I wish could be deferred,
some things our will can't stop and time sustains
this is the truth, the facts that walk with me.

I hide the hurt, the loss, but grieving stirred,
someday real soon, to count this all as gain
my chains removed, yes, walk the earth as free.

each night I step outside, your ghost appears.
I search the stars, but still I can't pretend,
my heart sincere, for you my love no end.
the moon shines bright, a light to dry my tears.

when all is said and done, my love will be,
true love that walks, through all eternity.
~~~~~~
anyone awake who can tell me if i got it right?
and maybe help with punuation..i'm finding that kind of tricky..and this is just a practice run, so dont mind the simplicity, i shoot for more elaborate later after i know what i'm doing!
thanks!!

 

[lostandfounder]

I'll try to put something together, but I don't want anybody to yell at me for miscounting syllables.

I'll take hyperbole....oh wait, that's taken....um...
Oh! I know! I'll take hyper-bully. Totally different.

P.S. What do I get if I win?


So many great poems this weekend... I fear my little one may be lost in the crowd.....Perversion Please, read, vote,comment. Love it or hate it?

The rest of my junk.

 

[lostandfounder]

Re: hyper plasmic love (a practice run)

~~~~~~
it stings me like a frost, a freeze of years,
so bold it stands, without a need to mend
it's said that time, is now to me my friend,
how long new love, be lost within my fears?

to say I need, is much to strong a word,
but truth be told my life now feels in vain
escape relents, I yield my life to pain,
forget the facts, and all the things i've heard.

forever love, I wish could be deferred,
some things our will can't stop and time sustains
this is the truth, the facts that walk with me.

I hide the hurt, the loss, but grieving stirred,
someday real soon, to count this all as gain
my chains removed, yes, walk the earth as free.

each night I step outside, your ghost appears.
I search the stars, but still I can't pretend,
my heart sincere, for you my love no end.
the moon shines bright, a light to dry my tears.

when all is said and done, my love will be,
true love that walks, through all eternity.
~~~~~~
anyone awake who can tell me if i got it right?
and maybe help with punuation..i'm finding that kind of tricky..and this is just a practice run, so dont mind the simplicity, i shoot for more elaborate later after i know what i'm doing!
thanks!!

I'm awake, but don't know much about sonnets, hyper or otherwise. In my uneducated opinion, it looks wonderful.

 

[perks]

A long, long time ago, there was a poet here at Lit called UP, and back then they had something called a Poetry Bootcamp. In it, there was a lot of pertinent information on sonnets and their form, as well a great little gambit on Iambic Pentameter by UP. (The following is an excerpt).


See, isn't that clear? Well, if you're like me, you might like the following example:

A line of iambic pentameter:
ta-DUH ta-DUH ta-DUH ta-DUH ta-DUH

If you're still having any trouble with it, we can turn this into a Iambic Workshop for the duration of the challenge.

also if you're of the shakespearean bent, you can add a smaller syllable at the end of the ta-DUHs. As in

ta-DUH, ta-DUH, ta-DUH, ta-DUH, ta-DUH-ta

 

[Liar]

Like fawnie, I think I've got the scheme and iambic bouncing right, but I'd need a second opinion from the gurus of the form...


hyperpyrexia
first draft

again I let the fire lick my face
again and over, taste that terror light
to dance across what sulphur stains ignite
as sense surrenders, fall to this embrace

a struggling but domesticated brain
run high on holy endorphines and heat
while razor rape is mocking my defeat
and torture tastes like kisses and cocaine

I turn the lever, peak the spikes of pain
but once again, an effort incomplete
to trigger yet another quantum leap

again I pray for bubbles in a vein
a final trojan horse to still the beat
to rinse this heart or let me fall asleep

I scour the void in pandemonic pace
a panic point, a pressure spinning sprite
ignited blood in teasing tickle blight
submerging stalemate sweet in purple haze

so please release this vice and cut me deep
restore my neural hurt and let me weep

 

[Liar]

also if you're of the shakespearean bent, you can add a smaller syllable at the end of the ta-DUHs. As in

ta-DUH, ta-DUH, ta-DUH, ta-DUH, ta-DUH-ta

And you say that NOW?!