Humans really are idiots

[BlackShanglan]

Present company excepted, of course. Or most of it, anyway. But I just read a wonderful story that really excited me. It was rich in poetic image and phrasing, spiked with humor throughout, and delightfully bawdy and earthy in a way fit for the Canterbury Tales. It had a warm, profane, barnyard feel that was really quite delightful and a strange, deeply amusing and somehow utterly believable sex scene that to me encapsulated the violent transition from adolescent to adult in a nutshell. (Or, as it happens, in the kitchen of a farmhouse.)

Then I turned to the PC's. Half of them, granted, were sensible admiration of a fine work. But the rest were whining complaints for more sex and demands that the author remove all beauty and allusion and simplify the narrative thread to a "See Spot run" level. It was most depressing.

Mind you, it offers some consolation: when one's ratings plunge, one might look to this as an example that, as Corporal Snark rightly points out, people are Philistines. On the other hand, it rather deflates my pleasure in such "H's" as I have managed to garner - is this where they came from?

Oh, just read this and grasp its beauty: Hunting Dawn.


Shanglan

 

[Penelope Street]

I remember this one.

I read "Hunting Dawn" last autumn. If nothing else, I liked it just for it being different, but it has more to offer than just that. I'd rather not spoil it by saying anything else.

Ok, one more thing: it's an easy five.

Take Care,
Penny

 

[neonlyte]

Concur. One of the richest painted canvases on Lit resides in Hunting Dawn, it's way past time that it should receive the recognition it deserves. Of course, he won't thank us for it, he'll more likely be embarrassed.

 

[Dar~]

Now I must read it as my beloved mentor Shanglan has called it great!

 

[Alex De Kok]

I, too, have to concur. 'Hunting Dawn' is an evocative piece. I read it last year and when I have a little more time may well read it again.

Alex

 

[Liar]

Yep. By far of the best written pieces I've read here, no matter what gauche has to say about that.

 

[impressive]

Okay, you can smack me for this, but ...

I adored the story telling. It is, without a doubt, totally top notch -- but technically I got hung up on a couple things which kinda took the bloom off the rose for me. Sorry.

 

[rgraham666]

You need only turn on the television to become aware of exactly how illiterate the hoi-polloi have become.

We're not quite to the level of Farenheit 451 for the level of popular entertainment, but we're getting close.

 

[cantdog]

Our foster daughter has come home for a while, and the television, in consequence, is on a good deal these days. There's a strange show called "Lost," but such incredible dreck fills the schedule! She watches the fluff and celebrity stuff, and the shows about animals, to which she has always shown a gift of affinity. Opens your eyes to see the tube again.

 

[OhMissScarlett]

Shanglan, I'm so glad you pointed this out. I can't believe I missed this one originally. Gauche rocks, that's just all there is to it. You don't see too many stories with a Feargal Sharkey reference.

 

[elsol]

*burp*

This is a porn site, right? Did you expect anything different?

Here's the recepei (Fuck I'm not a cook)... for a good scoring story.

a) Multiple-chapter
b) Sex in every chapter (every single chapter!)
c) Incest
d) multiple partners, ad infinitum, with no concequences or hurt feelings
e) Mind-control -- (But this might just be on other sites)
f) Sex in every chapter!

I wrote one (for another site... it's starts with the male character's sexual discovery of masturbation at 12 so it can't be posted on literotica) that is technically schlock! And by schlock, I mean that I didn't even use a grammar or spell checker... two drafts with no thought to writing, my goal was simply to teach myself to finish a story.

There's even a 5 page paragraph in there!

It's probably my second most popular story... why? Because except for the mind-control, it was designed as per the rules above, there's a chapter with NINE sex scenes in it. I'm not talking 'and then we fucked' either, I'm talking NINE fully described the beast with two backs sex scenes.

*shrug*

That's what the audience wants, but it doesn't mean that's what I want to write... I just assume I'm going to get beat up when I write something different.

Funny story: I have a fan that writes me after EVERY single I post... I write stereotypical male-dom stories but for one story I wanted to suggest, just suggest fdom, and he LAMBASTED me for it. He pulled out the shotgun and went old-school on me in email... a very eye-opening experience, especially because I consider it my second finest story.

He even told me "By the way, I gave it a four (out of ten) and that was being kind because I like the rest of your stuff."


Sincerely,
ElSol

 

[dr_mabeuse]

I didn't recognize the title, but once I went and had a look I remembered it instantly. As I recall, GC asked for feeback on it on the feedback board when it first came out. Anyhow, I know I'd read it before and it's a beautiful piece of writing.

Still, I had to smile. We've all heard of hopeless romantics, but I think Shanglan is the first example I've found of a hoepless classicist.

---Zoot

 

[BlackShanglan]

Still, I had to smile. We've all heard of hopeless romantics, but I think Shanglan is the first example I've found of a hoepless classicist.

---Zoot

Ah, welcome wit. Thanks, Zoot - best laugh I've had in quite a while.

Shanglan

 

[gauchecritic]

At the risk of bumping this to where others can read it, I feel I should give my thanks.

Neon was right, for all my bluster and self promotion I do get embarrassed when singled out, mainly because I don't feel that I put any great effort into writing.

On the other hand the score went up! and I got some more Public Messages to savour, along with more feedback.

Who knows, I may start writing again. (does hypnotism fit the Earth day requirements?)

To the question:

I think this relates to that other thread Is Lit losing its dedication to good stories. I think the answer to both is that this is the World Wide Web, and as such has as many 'readers' as it does 'jackoffs'.

You don't rent "Debbie Does Dallas" for its oscar nominations. On the other hand you don't write to Ridley Scott saying "Alien" would have been much better if Ripley had taken her singlet and panties off before getting in the sleep pod. Or do you?

 

[BlackShanglan]

On the other hand you don't write to Ridley Scott saying "Alien" would have been much better if Ripley had taken her singlet and panties off before getting in the sleep pod. Or do you?

He swore he wouldn't tell!

 

[shereads]

Coincidentally, idiots really are human.

 

[shereads]

deleted, because, well, I thought I was starting a thread and not replying to one IO'd already replied to.

I'm crazy. So sue me.

 

[BlackShanglan]

I'm crazy. So sue me.

Can't we just discipline you severely instead?

 

[Huckleman2000]

Nice story! He's got the chops, definitely. I would just say, cut it by 10-15%.

Of course, my oeurve is mainly confined to a world where, if you can't spell it out in half a paragraph and five bullet points, you've got a month or two of piecemeal education to accomplish.

So take my opinion with a big grain of salt.

 

[Belegon]

Adding another story to my list....I'd *sigh*, but adding stories by Cloudy and Gauche to my To-Read List is more of a *smile*....

 

[BlackShanglan]

Adding another story to my list....I'd *sigh*, but adding stories by Cloudy and Gauche to my To-Read List is more of a *smile*....

Good to see you, Bel! Does this mean that you're back online, or is it a brief moment of connection?