how to... get your story read.

[CrashOverride]

hey everyone! i was just curious what i have to do to get some people here to not only read my story i wrote yetserday. i put in a lot of thought and hard work, and i only wish for someone to tell me what they think about it. for those of you who are curious, here is the link to my story.
https://forum.literotica.com/attachment.php?s=&postid=4636986

 

[violent intimacy]

has it been approved yet?

I've seen each of your threads/posts on this, and I think the reason you haven't gotten much of a response (at least publically) is because you're providing an attachment instead of a link to a story that is approved and posted on Lit.

The FAQ has good info about getting your story read:
http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=27698

In short: wait till your story is approved and posted on Lit, then try again on the Feedback board.

 

[SexyChele]

hey everyone! i was just curious what i have to do to get some people here to not only read my story i wrote yetserday. i put in a lot of thought and hard work, and i only wish for someone to tell me what they think about it. for those of you who are curious, here is the link to my story.
https://forum.literotica.com/attachment.php?s=&postid=4636986

It's actually quite simple: Submit your story to Lit and have it posted.

While some here are readers, most readers do not browse the boards looking for stories to read. They look for stories under the story selection categories, not on the forums. Makes sense, yes?

As well, you wrote this in notepad (or that is what it looks like), and that is just too difficult to read. I tried and gave up. Notepad just doesn't have the easier formatting that Word or Lit's pages do. Do yourself and your readers a favor - submit the story. That way, you will get votes and feedback. You can also post a request for feedback (once the story is posted to Lit) on the Story Feedback forum. That way, you will get other writer's opinions as well.

However, from my very brief look at what you've written, I would say that you need to keep proper dialogue usage in mind. In other words: every time some one speaks, it's a new paragraph. Don't bury your dialogue in the middle of paragraphs. It confuses your readers.

Also, the "laundry list" thing is just plain old and tiresome. "I met this girl who was 5'8", weighed 110 pounds, with long blond hair, big blue eyes, and 44DDDDD tits." <YAWN>! You don't need to compose a list of features to your readers. Incorporate what the people look like throughout your story - if at all. Something like: "When I held her in my arms, she rested her head against my shoulder." "As we sat on the couch watching TV, I found I could not resist running my fingers through her silky blond hair and felt it's softness." "As she slowly removed her blouse, I couldn't help but notice how full and round her breasts were, and my fingers ached to brush the taut, hard nipples." Not great examples, but I hope you get the drift.

If you insist on doing the "laundry list" thing, do it in the beginning, before the story's beginning. Such as:

Characters:
Kate: 5'8", 110 pounds, long blond hair, big blue eyes, 44DDDDD tits.

Michael: 6'2", 185 pounds, short dark hair, brown eyes, 10 inches of solid cock.

"I met Kate at a local coffee house one afternoon..."

This way, it doesn't detract from the story. Though, as you can probably tell, I despise the use of "laundry lists". For me, it's the sign of a lazy writer. Sorry, just one of my pet peeves.

Anyway, post your story to Lit. It really doesn't hurt all that much, and you are more certain to get the feedback you are looking for.

Good luck!