How Not to Save a Marriage

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http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=102774

BY Margin Walker
Not a bad little story, good set up and good sex. Even through it was a little long before the sex, another sex scene might have been better but this is a minor criticism.
Two things: Since I have a tendency to over analyze these stories the writer may have or may not have thought this through but I wonder if the wife set things up so her husband would have sex with the friend. The friend almost hinted at that but was interrupted before she could get that far in her tale. I also wonder if the wife was as out of it as the friend said. Either the friend took advantage of the knowledge she had and the situation or the wife was in on it to some degree. And the way you set it up I think the marriage is not in as bad a shape he thought, It was his depression and frustration speaking. Now that he had a good, um, ur, fuck he should be feeling better. A sequel would be good I think at this point. Not necessary, some stories call for a sequel but this one doesn't so much, but it would be nice. Of course not knowing the writer I don't what she were thinking as she wrote it, but I being a helpless romantic know where I would take a sequel. I know that in real life marriage do fail, I know a few with friends, that have but this isn't realize and the way you set it up makes me think this one can be after all the wife does know she is the problem or a good portion of it, and that she doesn't give him enough sex. Then there is what the friend said about it being simple. When I first read that I wondered if he would save his marriage by having an affair with the friend. Or maybe the wife would have sex with someone who can teach her to enjoy sex more therefore she would want sex with her husband more.

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[BrownCuriousity]

re: How Not To Save A Marriage

I thought that this was an entertaining and stimulating story. Very detailed and captured the essence of having "forbidden" sex and the thrill of possibly getting caught. I liked it. The details of every little thing felt a little like, step one: I touched her face, step two: Then I kissed her neck...there could've been a little more fluidity and cohesion on just a couple of parts like that, but otherwise the details worked for it and not against it. I gave it a five.

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Re: re: How Not To Save A Marriage

I thought that this was an entertaining and stimulating story. Very detailed and captured the essence of having "forbidden" sex and the thrill of possibly getting caught. I liked it. The details of every little thing felt a little like, step one: I touched her face, step two: Then I kissed her neck...there could've been a little more fluidity and cohesion on just a couple of parts like that, but otherwise the details worked for it and not against it. I gave it a five.

b.c.

Once he got in bed I would agree. I think it took him slightly long to get there but it was good once there. And I explained already about wanting a sequel.

But today I thought that maybe I should give a coupel examples of stories I think need a sequel. One is "Accedental Fantasy". I forget how to the spell the writer's name. Nice set up and sex but does need a part two. However I most be the only one who thinks so. Since no one else will agree. "Where's Waldo" also needed a sequel but looks like the writer who I forget, thought so too, since there is one out. And there's "Wendy" by K.K.. again I most be the only one will thinks it absolutly needs an update.
Oh well .

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[BrownCuriousity]

I'll look for those stories and read them, then ill tell you if i agree.

 

[BrownCuriousity]

I'll look for those stories and read them, then ill tell you if i agree.

 

[BrownCuriousity]

Okay taboo, so I read Where's Waldo, its an EXCELLENT story. I thought it was funny, entertaining and it totally turned me on. However, I was surprised to find out that the sequel was a bit anti climatic. I was disappointed to find out that he was writing this story from "Ann's" point of view. I think that he should've just continued on with the story, moving forward, instead of telling us how the wife first got involved with the club. I dont know, thats just my opinion. I felt like I wasnt really interested. I got involved in the life of her husband, his character felt real, so that's why I think that his point of veiw interested me the most. However this is how I felt at first , reading the story more, I realized that it was also a pretty good. He did an excellent good job of finishing up the first "Waldo".

As for "Wendy" I didnt read that yet, but saw that there was another story on the author's page called "Wendy's Story." Is it a sequel, a prequel? I don't know I'm too tired right now to check it out but hopefully its a good enough read.

 

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Okay taboo, so I read Where's Waldo, its an EXCELLENT story. I thought it was funny, entertaining and it totally turned me on. However, I was surprised to find out that the sequel was a bit anti climatic. I was disappointed to find out that he was writing this story from "Ann's" point of view. I think that he should've just continued on with the story, moving forward, instead of telling us how the wife first got involved with the club. I dont know, thats just my opinion. I felt like I wasnt really interested. I got involved in the life of her husband, his character felt real, so that's why I think that his point of veiw interested me the most. However this is how I felt at first , reading the story more, I realized that it was also a pretty good. He did an excellent good job of finishing up the first "Waldo".

As for "Wendy" I didnt read that yet, but saw that there was another story on the author's page called "Wendy's Story." Is it a sequel, a prequel? I don't know I'm too tired right now to check it out but hopefully its a good enough read.

I have not read the sequel to "Where's Waldo" yet so I can't say what I think except to say that I am curious about the wife. And BTW I have some comments about the first story on this forum some place.
As to Wendy's Story. Wendy is from the husband's point of view of how he discovered his wife cheating and what he did. Its interesting and a bit intriquing and lot more then just sex even thoug the sex isn't bad. Wendy's story is the same events from the wife's point of view. Why she cheated ect. The sex is better in that one. One reason I think it needs an update is that it does not end like his others of that type, "Marci" and one about an asshole and "Susan" too. I think.
I also have comments on "Marci", "Wendy" and "Susan" if they are still up. Susan had a scene that for some reason hit me hard. Like finger nails on a blackboard or a sore note in a great classical music piece. It did not belong. I think I know one or both of two reasons it hit me like that but neither is the reason I thought when I made the comments. Or it could be all three put together.

You did not mention "Accedental Fantasy" which does have good sex but I would like to hear the conversation between the wife and her husband. If you read the story she mentions she will tell him everything, toward the end. And he is the only person whose feelings are not mentioned. And a sequel would be an opportunity for more arousing sex.


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[BrownCuriousity]

Well the reason I didnt mention "accendental fantasy" is because when I searched for it, I could not find it. What is the scene in that other story that "hit you hard"? What was it about?

 

[TabooTeller]

Well the reason I didnt mention "accendental fantasy" is because when I searched for it, I could not find it. What is the scene in that other story that "hit you hard"? What was it about?

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=97637

I had trouble finding it also but I found it under the writer's name. Try that address.

It is under Loving Wives.
But the scene in "Susan" takes after the couple is sperated, after he has sex with her and pretends its the drunk guy she went home with. She starts dating others and ends up having sex in their house with a date. He suspectes such would happend so he snuck into the house and spied on them. Remember they are seperated but not even filed for divorce yet. He goes through a bunch of emotions as he watches. To me there was no reason for that scene to put him through that. That is supposed to happen at the beginning of the story and at that late date it served no purpose. Everything that followed could have still followed without her having sex with the guy. If KK thought the main characrter had to have had those emotions run through him, he could have had her go through with it only part way but reject the fianl. I think that would have been better for the way KK set up the ending. Yes I know its just a story but we get invloved with story characters here in the US. I did send KK a comment about what I just said.

 

[BrownCuriousity]

I understand what you mean about him having to go through having his wife "really" cheat on him again later on in the story. The author obviously wanted to show how the husband felt about his wife, however like you said, she didnt have to go all the way through with it, but I guess another sex scene, is another sex scene regardless to how everything should have went down.

I read "Accidental Fantasy" and yes, it does need a sequel. Its a very good story however theres too many apologies and explanations towards the end for the spouse mix-up. It got repetitive and redundant, but overall I liked it.

 

[TabooTeller]

I understand what you mean about him having to go through having his wife "really" cheat on him again later on in the story. The author obviously wanted to show how the husband felt about his wife, however like you said, she didnt have to go all the way through with it, but I guess another sex scene, is another sex scene regardless to how everything should have went down.

I read "Accidental Fantasy" and yes, it does need a sequel. Its a very good story however theres too many apologies and explanations towards the end for the spouse mix-up. It got repetitive and redundant, but overall I liked it.

Could you send a note to the two writers telling them? Maybe MSemioleWind(?) will decide to write a seqquel if she gets enough requests. But did you notice that in her story the Main character's husband is the only one not stating what he feels?
But thanks for checking over the stories.

 

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Could you send a note to the two writers telling them? Maybe MSemioleWind(?) will decide to write a seqquel if she gets enough requests.


And a PS here

I sent K.K. my comments on "Susan" and he responded. That surprised me since I have sent him comments on four to six stories and that is the only one has even acknowledged recieving. Anyway basically he said that he had his reaosn for having Susan have sex but he didn't want to take the time to explain them. From what else he said I wondered if they were personal reasons. Since he only responded to a criticisim maybe I should complain about more of his stories.
Actually there is one more story, "Party Tricks" I think, whose ending I could comment on. Its not bad, its just that it ends in a question. A husband has to decide rather to let his wife have more sex with men as long as she describes it to him. She did once and he was very aroused but didn't want to decide then. Anyway it weren't be much of a criticism actually.

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http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=30980

Here is another story I comments on a while back, I forget of you responded to this one yet or not. But It starts off as a good story but when the husband gets slapped, it starts to go down hill. He gets way too much punishment and what his wife tells him after they get him is below the belt. The other wife who helps get him into trouble is not punished what so ever. She is in fact part of his punishment. That is not to say that something should not have happened to him but as I said went way too much.

And Bye The Way I now have a story on Liteerotica. "She Allowed The Seduction" Not sure if I can link it since I already haev one on this page.

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