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I have submitted my first story on Tuesday morning and it has not been posted yet. *POUT* does it always take that long?? Or is this a signal that my story isn't very good?
How long does it take *smile
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Not Accepted????
Has anyone else ever had a story not accepted??? I went to my member page that shows the stories i submitted and all week it said it was pending. Today i went and it stated not accepted??? I am attaching it as an attachment for someone to read it........ why would it not be accepted??? This is a complete let down. I was so excited to share my writings. Perhaps if i get an explaination I can be sure to make changes when submitted something else.....
Has anyone else ever had a story not accepted??? I went to my member page that shows the stories i submitted and all week it said it was pending. Today i went and it stated not accepted??? I am attaching it as an attachment for someone to read it........ why would it not be accepted??? This is a complete let down. I was so excited to share my writings. Perhaps if i get an explaination I can be sure to make changes when submitted something else.....
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Story........
Seems as though my attachment didn't show up. Gawd I am really screwing this up.
Here is the story.......
Secretary's Day
I took a look at the huge pile of papers that began to resemble mountains on my desk. I plopped down in my seat and began to drift off. The phone rang bringing me back to reality. I work for a large firm in Pittsburgh, PA. Being a secretary was not always my plan in life but it has its benefits. Especially when you work for one of the town’s wealthiest attorneys on the east cost. Not to mention one of the best looking. Every woman in the building only dreams of having this man once. I was told he was a player but have not fully witnessed it myself. I must confess he has been part of my fantasies for some time now. I am not a very aggressive woman when it comes to sexual experience but I must admit that this man brings out a side of me that makes me want to explode with sexual hunger. I even found myself dressing sexier at work going as far as wearing thigh high stockings with no panties and even unbuttoning by blouse a button further when I know we are in the office alone. I am not sure if he has noticed but I truly won’t stop trying.
This morning I was feeling exceptionally sexy. I was wearing a suit, short red skirt and jacket with a white button down blouse. My sheer white blouse exposed the push up white lace bra that held my 36C breast tightly in place. I had on nude thigh high stockings, and although in days past I excused myself from wearing panties, today I wore a white lace thong.
I walked into my boss Steve’s office; we meet regularly each morning to discuss his agenda as well as meeting dates and times. I walked into his office with date book, pad and pen in hand. I walked in quietly not to disturb what he was doing, for his eyes where glued to his notebook (laptop). I walked over to the coffeepot that set in the nook near his desk, poured him a cup of coffee and proceeded toward his desk. As I bent over to place the coffee in front of him I noticed that my blouse was unbuttoned, beyond what I had expected. What was I to do, setting the coffee in front of him I hoped he just wouldn’t pass his eyes from his notebook for then he wouldn’t notice my embarrassed face, as well as the now exposed tits that hung out so eagerly at him.
Steve looked up at me, his eyes now planted at my breast. I didn’t know if I should hide my face or lash out onto his desk and scream for him to take me. For I can’t deny that thought has past through my daily thoughts a million times. A smile gleamed across his face. “Is this what’s on today’s agenda?”, he asked never once taking his eyes off my now erect nipples. I ignored him, as to act as though I had no idea what he was talking about. I walked behind his desk getting a glimpse of what he was absorbed in at his laptop. He appeared to be writing an article of some sort. Much to my surprise he was ready or writing erotica. I struggled to get a glimpse of some of the literature. He glanced up at me, moving the notebook closer as to give me a better look, “go on, read it if you like” he said in a most inviting way. How could I resist the invitation? Erotica is one of my favorites; not to mention I will be given a glimpse of what goes on in the mind of the most wanted man.
After reading several lines I was taken, not to mention turned on immensely. The story was about an executive who had secret fantasies and desires to fuck his secretary. As I read further I suddenly felt Steve’s fingertips at the back of my thigh, slowly caressing along the silky nylon of my stockings. I was too absorbed in this story to stop him. His hands glided up under my skirt, running slowly over the lace of my thigh highs. I could now feel his hands rolling over my smooth round ass as his fingers made their way down along its crack. His fingers gently made way to my slit, running his finger along the elastic of my thong panty that barely covered my puss that was now soaking wet with anticipation. He slid a finger inside my puss, taking a deep breath and letting out a soft sigh when he felt how incredibly wet and warm I have become. He probed his finger slowly in and out, and I looked on at the story as to not even notice. I was loving it, I wanted more of him. He took a hold of my other hand, turning me around to face him. I straddled over his lap as he sat at his desk. M’m I could feel the coolness of his trousers as they hit my bare ass. There is such an erotic feeling about having sex partially dressed. The feeling of my bare puss rubbing against his trousers is such a turn on. I can feel my insides begin to slightly pulsate as I yearn to have him deep within me. I press a bit harder against his trousers as I can feel the life inside them beginning to grow. I lean forward and slowly glide my lips and tongue along his nose making my way to place a kiss at his lips. Our tongues eagerly meet. I take a hold of his tongue and suck at it feeling it roll in and out of my mouth. His hands reach to unbutton my blouse exposing my white lace bra. His lips leave mine and he leans to kiss between my breast. Sliding my bra to the side he exposes my large dark brown nipple and his tongue rolls around it, flicking it, and sucking the nipple in between his lips. I can feel my puss getting wetter as he licks and flicks my erect nipples. I press a bit harder at his lap. Feeling his cock within his trousers I begin to wave my hips back and forth, back and forth. I lean back almost lying down on his desk, exposing my puss to his full view. He takes his fingers and begins to rub my clit that is aching for his attention. He presses his thumb to lift the hood. His thumb rolls in circles around my clit as I continue to wave my hips in the motion of his fingers. Small moans of pleasure begin to echo throughout the room as my wetness begins to roll along his fingertips. He lowers me down onto the desk and his tongue touches my labia. Gawd it feels so good as he glides his tongue up along my lips and begins to flick my clit uncontrollably. I call out for him not to stop. He fingers glide along my wet puss, getting them nice and wet as he probes his middle finger deep into my ass. He glides and twists his finger in and out of my ass as his tongue laps at my horny puss. My hips wave up and down along his face....my hands take a hold of his head, pressing him deeper into me. I rock faster, as his tongue and finger fucks me to no end! He suddenly stops, knowing I am at the edge of climaxing. As I lay on the desk he stands in front of me and unbuttons his trousers. His cock is about to break the seams of his trousers as he unzips his pants to set it free. I lean forward and take a hold of his cock and quickly begin to stroke and suck at it. My lips roll around the head, around the ridge, sliding my fingers and lips up and down his rock hard shaft. I soon slide him deep into my mouth. I can feel his cock getting harder with each glide along my velvet tongue. My mouth is so warm, so moist he begins to imagine his cock is deep inside my puss. He begs for me to suck him faster. And in no way do i want to disappoint him. I latch on tighter, letting the water roll from my mouth down along his cock. You can hear the sucking noises as I press him in and out of my mouth. I pull his head to my lips and run it back and forth along my lips. I can taste the salty precum that is seeping from the tip of his cock. He moans a bit loader, pumping his cock into my mouth as his cum begins to spray along my lips. I pull him out, stroking long and hard at his cock. His cum spraying out along my exposed breast. He leans forward to kiss me, tasting a bit of the cum that still lays along my lips. He presses me back along the desk and raises my legs to his shoulders rubbing his exhausted cock along my drenched puss. I can feel the head at is glides along my clit. He presses his cock deep inside me. I let out a cry of pleasure as he rocks his hips in and out of my puss holding on to my angles with each thrust. I reach down and beginning to rub my clitty furiously as he fucks me. When I can’t take it anymore I let out a cry of pleasure and beg him to press harder as my own nectar rolls down along the side of his cock and under to my ass.
I waved my hand in front of my boss’s face as his eyes drifted off into space. “Sir, are we going to discuss today’s agenda? “ I asked. “Yes, yes we are.“ he stuttered, “I was just writing it in my notebook. Here. Read it and tell me what you think??”
Seems as though my attachment didn't show up. Gawd I am really screwing this up.
Here is the story.......
Secretary's Day
I took a look at the huge pile of papers that began to resemble mountains on my desk. I plopped down in my seat and began to drift off. The phone rang bringing me back to reality. I work for a large firm in Pittsburgh, PA. Being a secretary was not always my plan in life but it has its benefits. Especially when you work for one of the town’s wealthiest attorneys on the east cost. Not to mention one of the best looking. Every woman in the building only dreams of having this man once. I was told he was a player but have not fully witnessed it myself. I must confess he has been part of my fantasies for some time now. I am not a very aggressive woman when it comes to sexual experience but I must admit that this man brings out a side of me that makes me want to explode with sexual hunger. I even found myself dressing sexier at work going as far as wearing thigh high stockings with no panties and even unbuttoning by blouse a button further when I know we are in the office alone. I am not sure if he has noticed but I truly won’t stop trying.
This morning I was feeling exceptionally sexy. I was wearing a suit, short red skirt and jacket with a white button down blouse. My sheer white blouse exposed the push up white lace bra that held my 36C breast tightly in place. I had on nude thigh high stockings, and although in days past I excused myself from wearing panties, today I wore a white lace thong.
I walked into my boss Steve’s office; we meet regularly each morning to discuss his agenda as well as meeting dates and times. I walked into his office with date book, pad and pen in hand. I walked in quietly not to disturb what he was doing, for his eyes where glued to his notebook (laptop). I walked over to the coffeepot that set in the nook near his desk, poured him a cup of coffee and proceeded toward his desk. As I bent over to place the coffee in front of him I noticed that my blouse was unbuttoned, beyond what I had expected. What was I to do, setting the coffee in front of him I hoped he just wouldn’t pass his eyes from his notebook for then he wouldn’t notice my embarrassed face, as well as the now exposed tits that hung out so eagerly at him.
Steve looked up at me, his eyes now planted at my breast. I didn’t know if I should hide my face or lash out onto his desk and scream for him to take me. For I can’t deny that thought has past through my daily thoughts a million times. A smile gleamed across his face. “Is this what’s on today’s agenda?”, he asked never once taking his eyes off my now erect nipples. I ignored him, as to act as though I had no idea what he was talking about. I walked behind his desk getting a glimpse of what he was absorbed in at his laptop. He appeared to be writing an article of some sort. Much to my surprise he was ready or writing erotica. I struggled to get a glimpse of some of the literature. He glanced up at me, moving the notebook closer as to give me a better look, “go on, read it if you like” he said in a most inviting way. How could I resist the invitation? Erotica is one of my favorites; not to mention I will be given a glimpse of what goes on in the mind of the most wanted man.
After reading several lines I was taken, not to mention turned on immensely. The story was about an executive who had secret fantasies and desires to fuck his secretary. As I read further I suddenly felt Steve’s fingertips at the back of my thigh, slowly caressing along the silky nylon of my stockings. I was too absorbed in this story to stop him. His hands glided up under my skirt, running slowly over the lace of my thigh highs. I could now feel his hands rolling over my smooth round ass as his fingers made their way down along its crack. His fingers gently made way to my slit, running his finger along the elastic of my thong panty that barely covered my puss that was now soaking wet with anticipation. He slid a finger inside my puss, taking a deep breath and letting out a soft sigh when he felt how incredibly wet and warm I have become. He probed his finger slowly in and out, and I looked on at the story as to not even notice. I was loving it, I wanted more of him. He took a hold of my other hand, turning me around to face him. I straddled over his lap as he sat at his desk. M’m I could feel the coolness of his trousers as they hit my bare ass. There is such an erotic feeling about having sex partially dressed. The feeling of my bare puss rubbing against his trousers is such a turn on. I can feel my insides begin to slightly pulsate as I yearn to have him deep within me. I press a bit harder against his trousers as I can feel the life inside them beginning to grow. I lean forward and slowly glide my lips and tongue along his nose making my way to place a kiss at his lips. Our tongues eagerly meet. I take a hold of his tongue and suck at it feeling it roll in and out of my mouth. His hands reach to unbutton my blouse exposing my white lace bra. His lips leave mine and he leans to kiss between my breast. Sliding my bra to the side he exposes my large dark brown nipple and his tongue rolls around it, flicking it, and sucking the nipple in between his lips. I can feel my puss getting wetter as he licks and flicks my erect nipples. I press a bit harder at his lap. Feeling his cock within his trousers I begin to wave my hips back and forth, back and forth. I lean back almost lying down on his desk, exposing my puss to his full view. He takes his fingers and begins to rub my clit that is aching for his attention. He presses his thumb to lift the hood. His thumb rolls in circles around my clit as I continue to wave my hips in the motion of his fingers. Small moans of pleasure begin to echo throughout the room as my wetness begins to roll along his fingertips. He lowers me down onto the desk and his tongue touches my labia. Gawd it feels so good as he glides his tongue up along my lips and begins to flick my clit uncontrollably. I call out for him not to stop. He fingers glide along my wet puss, getting them nice and wet as he probes his middle finger deep into my ass. He glides and twists his finger in and out of my ass as his tongue laps at my horny puss. My hips wave up and down along his face....my hands take a hold of his head, pressing him deeper into me. I rock faster, as his tongue and finger fucks me to no end! He suddenly stops, knowing I am at the edge of climaxing. As I lay on the desk he stands in front of me and unbuttons his trousers. His cock is about to break the seams of his trousers as he unzips his pants to set it free. I lean forward and take a hold of his cock and quickly begin to stroke and suck at it. My lips roll around the head, around the ridge, sliding my fingers and lips up and down his rock hard shaft. I soon slide him deep into my mouth. I can feel his cock getting harder with each glide along my velvet tongue. My mouth is so warm, so moist he begins to imagine his cock is deep inside my puss. He begs for me to suck him faster. And in no way do i want to disappoint him. I latch on tighter, letting the water roll from my mouth down along his cock. You can hear the sucking noises as I press him in and out of my mouth. I pull his head to my lips and run it back and forth along my lips. I can taste the salty precum that is seeping from the tip of his cock. He moans a bit loader, pumping his cock into my mouth as his cum begins to spray along my lips. I pull him out, stroking long and hard at his cock. His cum spraying out along my exposed breast. He leans forward to kiss me, tasting a bit of the cum that still lays along my lips. He presses me back along the desk and raises my legs to his shoulders rubbing his exhausted cock along my drenched puss. I can feel the head at is glides along my clit. He presses his cock deep inside me. I let out a cry of pleasure as he rocks his hips in and out of my puss holding on to my angles with each thrust. I reach down and beginning to rub my clitty furiously as he fucks me. When I can’t take it anymore I let out a cry of pleasure and beg him to press harder as my own nectar rolls down along the side of his cock and under to my ass.
I waved my hand in front of my boss’s face as his eyes drifted off into space. “Sir, are we going to discuss today’s agenda? “ I asked. “Yes, yes we are.“ he stuttered, “I was just writing it in my notebook. Here. Read it and tell me what you think??”
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Got it......
Okay ....
I just got an email from literotica stating " the story not broken into appropriately sized paragraphs"
Guess back to the presses on that one.......anyone with suggestions all comments and critisize welcomed....
*smile
Okay ....
I just got an email from literotica stating " the story not broken into appropriately sized paragraphs"
Guess back to the presses on that one.......anyone with suggestions all comments and critisize welcomed....
*smile
"...white lace bra that held my 36C breast tightly in place." Only one breast? Creepy. 
This one goes in my list of especially painfull technical errors.
I have to agree with literotica, that one huge paragraph is a little mesmerizing. Definitely use some white space. It'll look longer too
A few technical errors, breast notwithstanding. The use of 'puss' just didn't seem to do anything for me, though, which was a bit of a let-down. The act of actual intercorse was very short in comparison to everything else, but the build-up to that point was written pretty well (puss aside.) The last bit of the story seemed...odd. I think I'm just not getting the joke, but if it's too hidden like that it needs some work. And some of the elements of story seemed a unconnected to the story.
Good grief. I don't want to sound like too much of a downer, here, but I want to give honest feedback and I really didn't like the story too much. Don't let me knock you out of the loop or anything, give it another go and see if you can nail it. Good luck!
-I
This one goes in my list of especially painfull technical errors.I have to agree with literotica, that one huge paragraph is a little mesmerizing. Definitely use some white space. It'll look longer too
A few technical errors, breast notwithstanding. The use of 'puss' just didn't seem to do anything for me, though, which was a bit of a let-down. The act of actual intercorse was very short in comparison to everything else, but the build-up to that point was written pretty well (puss aside.) The last bit of the story seemed...odd. I think I'm just not getting the joke, but if it's too hidden like that it needs some work. And some of the elements of story seemed a unconnected to the story.
Good grief. I don't want to sound like too much of a downer, here, but I want to give honest feedback and I really didn't like the story too much. Don't let me knock you out of the loop or anything, give it another go and see if you can nail it. Good luck!
-I
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*smile
I like and want honest opinions. This was my first attempt at submitting a story to a genuine site. As the message under my handle states I am still a "virgin" *giggle. I am use to writing what is in my mind, i have to learn to write to my audience. And as far as "puss" goes, i too hate that word just was never certain about what words to use. I couldn't refer to it as what I call it, I dont think anyone out their will know what I mean when I say my "suezie" *smile*. I did find a page within the site that gives a list of alternative names which can be used for such areas. Again thank you for your input. It is greatly appreciated. I use only my spellchecker when writng these and it doesn't pick up allot of the improper gramer. I hope to learn much much more as I go along.
Many thanks.......
I like and want honest opinions. This was my first attempt at submitting a story to a genuine site. As the message under my handle states I am still a "virgin" *giggle. I am use to writing what is in my mind, i have to learn to write to my audience. And as far as "puss" goes, i too hate that word just was never certain about what words to use. I couldn't refer to it as what I call it, I dont think anyone out their will know what I mean when I say my "suezie" *smile*. I did find a page within the site that gives a list of alternative names which can be used for such areas. Again thank you for your input. It is greatly appreciated. I use only my spellchecker when writng these and it doesn't pick up allot of the improper gramer. I hope to learn much much more as I go along.
Many thanks.......
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