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[the_apocalypse]

Good morning everyone.

I have just had a new story accepted and I was wondering what people thought. I have indicated that it is the first chapter but any more chapters depend on what people think.

It is in the transsexuals/crossdressers category and called The girl in the red bikini CH 01

Any feedback either, expecially contructive is always welcomed.

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=511455

 

[Experiencedguy]

As a stand alone, it leaves a lot to be desired. But, as a first chapter, this is a great beginning. I'm sure you have read the story responses. Those who are into TS will love this -- depending on where you go.

This intro leaves a lot of open questions, which I am sure you will answer as the chapters continue.

But all means -- keep up the good work.

 

[the_apocalypse]

As a stand alone, it leaves a lot to be desired. But, as a first chapter, this is a great beginning. I'm sure you have read the story responses. Those who are into TS will love this -- depending on where you go.

This intro leaves a lot of open questions, which I am sure you will answer as the chapters continue.

But all means -- keep up the good work.

Thank you for your input and just to let you know that I am currently writing chapter two this afternoon