How do you say lips without saying lips?

[TheEarl]

I'm trying to describe a kiss and I keep wanting to say the word lips. Over and over and over again. Surely there must be a synonym somewhere?

Here's the passage in question and the major problem:

He leaned forward and kissed her, his lips brushing softly against hers. His tongue slid across her lips...

The Earl

 

[Chynas Dick]

aperture, beak, box, buss, cavity, chops, clam, crevice, delta, door, embouchement, entrance, estuary, firth, fly trap, funnel, gate, gills, gob, harbor, inlet, jaws, kisser, lips, mush, orifice, portal, rim, trap, yap

 

[CharleyH]

I'm trying to describe a kiss and I keep wanting to say the word lips. Over and over and over again. Surely there must be a synonym somewhere?

Here's the passage in question and the major problem:

He leaned forward and kissed her, his lips brushing softly against hers. His tongue slid across her lips...

The Earl

He leaned into her mouth, his tongue stretched, meeting hers, entwining, swirling, stabbing deep into her throat.

Grammar not perfect, but Earl, these two sentances I have seen this evening have made me think passive voice? As in you are telling and not showing> Perhaps this is why you ask about them? Just a thought.

 

[sweetnpetite]

I'm trying to describe a kiss and I keep wanting to say the word lips. Over and over and over again. Surely there must be a synonym somewhere?

Here's the passage in question and the major problem:

He leaned forward and kissed her, his lips brushing softly against hers. His tongue slid across her lips...

The Earl

My puter tells me:

mouth
orifice
maw
chops
entrance
opening
apurture
orifice
face
countanance
expression (?)
mug
kisser
pucker
smoocher(s)
lobes (?)
protrudence (SP?)
outcropping
projection
---- any help?

 

[impressive]

I'm trying to describe a kiss and I keep wanting to say the word lips. Over and over and over again. Surely there must be a synonym somewhere?

Here's the passage in question and the major problem:

He leaned forward and kissed her, his lips brushing softly against hers. His tongue slid across her lips...

The Earl

I ran into a similar problem recently with tears.

Try ...

"He leaned forward and kissed her, their mouths softly brushing. His tongue slid ...."

(Watch that adverb, though. *grin* )

 

[sweetnpetite]

protuberance
protusion
shelf
ridge
puffiness
bulge
bump
lump
distention (probably not best!)
???

 

[CharleyH]

ADDING: DESCRIBE the kiss, not the lips

 

[shereads]

Fleshy mouth closures?

 

[shereads]

Maw and chops are sexy.

My puter tells me:

mouth
orifice
maw
chops
entrance
opening
apurture
orifice
face
countanance
expression (?)
mug
kisser
pucker
smoocher(s)
lobes (?)
protrudence (SP?)
outcropping
projection
---- any help?

But "outcropping" is the one that makes me crazy.

 

[CharleyH]

Fleshy mouth closures?

LOL. Fleshy lips closing on ....

ROFL, STOP IT!

 

[sweetnpetite]

I'm trying to describe a kiss and I keep wanting to say the word lips. Over and over and over again. Surely there must be a synonym somewhere?

Here's the passage in question and the major problem:

He leaned forward and kissed her, his lips brushing softly against hers. His tongue slid across her lips...

The Earl

if you want to get metaphoric, stick with something that fits the characters or the story in some way. that's my suggestion. If he's a chef, he might compare her lips to food or cooking utensiles- and if she's a painter, she might compare his lips to her brushes or some other tool?

Also, maybe you can use sense words to describe them rather than name them- ie. softeness, warmth, satiny-smooth or whatever.

 

[TheEarl]

ADDING: DESCRIBE the kiss, not the lips

Ah, the description comes next up. I just need to get the motion and then I can talk about the warmth that rises through her body as the kiss deepens, his movements becoming more... etc etc

The Earl

 

[Quiet_Cool]

I'm trying to describe a kiss and I keep wanting to say the word lips. Over and over and over again. Surely there must be a synonym somewhere?

Here's the passage in question and the major problem:

He leaned forward and kissed her, his lips brushing softly against hers. His tongue slid across her lips...

The Earl

He leaned forward and kissed her, his lips brushing lightly against hers, his tongue sliding across them, wetting them, separating them...

A run-on, but it doesn't matter any more than it would were it a fragment. It avoids the repitition, and may add to fluency by allowing the reader to avoid stopping (though hardly in a noticable way) at the periods.

Q_C

 

[TheEarl]

He leaned into her mouth, his tongue stretched, meeting hers, entwining, swirling, stabbing deep into her throat.

Grammar not perfect, but Earl, these two sentances I have seen this evening have made me think passive voice? As in you are telling and not showing> Perhaps this is why you ask about them? Just a thought.

Hmm. I wouldn't have said it was overly passive. I'll post the whole paragraph when I've finished (just a couple of minutes and you can tell me).

The Earl

 

[Edward Teach]

The Goose's too seldom used AV!!

Eddie The Drooler

 

[OhMissScarlett]

Fleshy mouth closures?

I'm making a note of that for future use.

 

[TheEarl]

La:

Connor’s hand ran down her bare arm before sliding onto her side, rucking up the base of her top so that his fingers could touch her skin. “That, is what happens every time I think about your little confession.” He pushed her shirt further up, his hand exploring more of her midriff. “I decided to do a little research on Literotica, and the things I read there just made me want to do everything with you.”

He leaned forward and kissed her, their mouths softly brushing. His tongue slid across her lips and she shivered as the kiss deepened, his movement growing more urgent. Warmth built in the pit of her stomach and Elsie pulled at the buttons of his shirt, placing her hands inside to rest on his smooth chest, her body shaking from the thought that Connor shared her fantasy. The idea of him spanking her was making her wet already and she kissed him even more fervently, feverish in her desire for him.

Connor pulled her to her feet and kissed her again, his hands winding round her, wandering over her back, then moving down to squeeze her arse. Suddenly his hand moved away and slapped down with a crack. The sharp sting and rush of heat flooded through her body, sending scorching tingles radiating out from just below her clit. Elsie trembled, a gasp breaking from her lips. She felt warm, and brazen and sexy. Her hands grabbed at his shirt, ripping at the buttons to tear it off him so she could feel more of his skin.

The Earl

 

[cantdog]

Hmm. I wouldn't have said it was overly passive. I'll post the whole paragraph when I've finished (just a couple of minutes and you can tell me).

The Earl

I duck repetition of 'pussy' the way women do, in speech. They elide it. Pronouns, usually. Reconstruction of the sentence, as two of your helpful hinters here have done, to skip over the word while still making a clear reference.

Charley is full of it about passive voice. The lips were caressed by his tongue tip-- that's passive voice. The tongue brushed across her lips-- that's active.

cantdog

 

[shereads]

He leaned forward and kissed her, his lips brushing lightly against hers, his tongue sliding across them, wetting them, separating them...

A run-on, but it doesn't matter any more than it would were it a fragment. It avoids the repitition, and may add to fluency by allowing the reader to avoid stopping (though hardly in a noticable way) at the periods.

Q_C

I am a fan of run-on kisses.

 

[minsue]

The Goose's too seldom used AV!!

Eddie The Drooler

Awwww....you made me blush.

 

[CharleyH]

I duck repetition of 'pussy' the way women do, in speech. They elide it. Pronouns, usually. Reconstruction of the sentence, as two of your helpful hinters here have done, to skip over the word while still making a clear reference.

Charley is full of it about passive voice. The lips were caressed by his tongue tip-- that's passive voice. The tongue brushed across her lips-- that's active.

cantdog

did I say mmm?

 

[dr_mabeuse]

There's no good synonym for "lips". (Forget all about "bucal membranes" and "labium") And "tongue" is even worse (I've seen "lingual digit" attempted with obviously disastrous results.) Those are two of the Natural Laws of Porn that we just have to work around, like physicists have to work around the speed of light or law of gravity, or golfers play around sand traps.

I'd suggest that, if absolutely necessary, you fall back on the old standbyes skin and flesh, as in "He kissed her lips, his tongue tracing over her delicate skin." Or else you have him kissing the inside of her lips a lot, where you can talk about her "flesh".

Porn ain't easy. I'm still looking for a decent word for breast besides breast. "Tits" is just barely acceptable, all the rest are just silly or juvenile.

 

[TheEarl]

There's no good synonym for "lips". (Forget all about "bucal membranes" and "labium") And "tongue" is even worse (I've seen "lingual digit" attempted with obviously disastrous results.) Those are two of the Natural Laws of Porn that we just have to work around, like physicists have to work around the speed of light or law of gravity, or golfers play around sand traps.

I'd suggest that, if absolutely necessary, you fall back on the old standbyes skin and flesh, as in "He kissed her lips, his tongue tracing over her delicate skin." Or else you have him kissing the inside of her lips a lot, where you can talk about her "flesh".

Porn ain't easy. I'm still looking for a decent word for breast besides breast. "Tits" is just barely acceptable, all the rest are just silly or juvenile.

Lingual digit? BWAAAAHAHAHAHAHA!

Try cleavage for breasts. That's my favoured synonym; I don't like using 'tits'.

The Earl

 

[dr_mabeuse]

Lingual digit? BWAAAAHAHAHAHAHA!

Try cleavage for breasts. That's my favoured synonym; I don't like using 'tits'.

The Earl

You mean like, "He took her cleavage in his hands"?

Isn't that like eating a donut hole?

 

[TheEarl]

You mean like, "He took her cleavage in his hands"?

Isn't that like eating a donut hole?

You can't use it as liberally as 'breasts' but it's still useful on occasions.

The Earl