litstorywriter
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- Sep 21, 2009
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http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=484196
only 2 pages but..
i spent a month editing it over and over again. i hope to have improved since my first story by adding 'dialogue' and 'long descriptive scenes'.
i realize there is no story, but i think the description is original.
please do leave me a comment about how it could be better??. I've tried hard.
only 2 pages but..
i spent a month editing it over and over again. i hope to have improved since my first story by adding 'dialogue' and 'long descriptive scenes'.
i realize there is no story, but i think the description is original.
please do leave me a comment about how it could be better??. I've tried hard.
