Hot off my fingertips

[BlackSnake]

I just finished my latest works approximately 34, 100 words. I am looking for someone who would be interested in editing it. I'm posting the first 3 chapters unedited, so that you can judge the kind of work that needs to be done. You can PM if you are interested. It is double spaced and enough room for comments.

Chapter 1:

Emma Johnston or Ms Emma, as the young people in the neighborhood called her, stretched her neck to hear what Gloria and Janice were talking about in the driveway next door. Emma had already saturated the ground with the water from the hose, but she was dying to hear some fresh gossip.

“Wait a minute,” Gloria said interrupting Janice. “Ms Noisy-butt is trying to break her neck to hear what's going on over here.”

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Chapter 2

“Oh shit...get up!” Denise exclaimed pushing Julius Austin off her hearing keys unlocking the front door.

Julius struggled to get his pants up from around his ankles.

Gloria dropped the two bags of groceries on the floor seeing her daughter trying to close her blouse and her neighbor’s husband pulling up his pants.

 

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Chapter 3:

Gloria slammed the telephone down and made herself another drink. What her daughter said to her echoed in her mind. She did what she felt she had to do to get the things that she needed for herself and her two children. Allowing a man to paw her was nothing compared to the smiles on their faces come Christmas morning.

Thoughts of how naive she once were with the father of her children. He kept her hanging on while he dated other women and pretended to care for her so she wouldn't ask him for child support. She bought all of his lies, but in the end all she got from him was screwed with two kids. It wasn’t until he had finally left her for good that she began to see the truth. She was able to see that all men wanted was to get between her legs. She also realized that she could get what she wanted.

Her heart ached from calling her daughter a whore. She felt she had sacrificed so much to give her son and daughter everything they needed. The last thing she wanted to see was her daughter following in her footsteps.