Fantasmassexuai
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First of all, sorry for any mistake, English isn't my primary language. And sorry for asking about something that isn't very "innovative".
As I said in my intro, I've been writing my sexual fantasies from some time now, but I usually have the same problem - I rarely finish them. I can write a couple of chapters and then move on to another one. This time I would like to try my hand at doing a complete one. But I would like some feedback on it, so here's the main idea.
The story will be in first-person because I usually love to get on the thick of it
I'm 19, living with my parents (mother is 47 and I'll be using the model Milena Velba as her "template", father is 48 - I imagine him being an older Peter North
) and my younger brother. We have also 2 students living with us (we did have them in real life) both of them 22 years old.
I have my own small room, right next to my parent's, while my brother shares the bedroom with the 2 students (in real life we slept all 4 in one room, lol). Me and the students usually go to bed very late - I'm usually on my PC; the students stay on the living room on their laptops/seeing Tv/even studying! My parents and my brother go to sleep at 11PM, 12PM.
So during one of those nights, I'm talking to a friend on MSN/YahooMessenger and he says that there's something wrong happening all over the world. We check GoogleNews and there's reports that there's an infection going around. It's like 2am at no-one seems to know where it started.
The only thing that they know is that it transform people in a certain age range into sex-maniacs (so no children/elderly people are infected) who try to fuck everyone (once again, all in their age range but they don't care about family ties/if is a male/female).
As I'm starting to open my door to go downstairs and watch further developments on TV, I see my friend texting me, saying that there are now reports that TV broadcasts seem to be the source of the infection. Anyone that had a TV on gets infected (the idea is similar to the "Pulse" novel by Stephen King and the infection is like the Intersect on the 'Chuck' tv series - some seconds of millions of images flashing on the screen).
I see that information and at the same time I hear a commotion on the stairs. I peek out and see that the 2 students are coming up, to the floor bellow entering the room they share with my brother. I send a BRB to my friend and go check what's happening. I can hear lots of noise coming from the room so I slowly peek around the door - the rooms is in disarray with the only light coming from a lamp on the floor, the 2 guys are on my brother's bed (bed sheets all over the place, his t-shirt and boxers are all ripped up) and they are making him suck them, etc. (I'll write the rest of the sex in the story itself). And he seems to be enjoying the treatment
Of course like in all good gay/incest stories I can't resist and get excited when I see that. I've always been attracted to my brother (I'm bisexual in real life and in the story) and I just love to see him there. What I don't notice at first is that one of the guys has a smartphone on his hand and he's streaming some broadcast on it, pointing it to my brother. So after a while, when the sex stops, I see that they loose interest in him and start to wander across the room. He then gets up from the bed (ripped clothes, lots of cum on his body) and joins them.
I decide to go back into my room but when I back up, I make some noise and they all look at the direction of the door and start to move. I go up the stairs with them in pursuit and get to my room and lock it, then further block it with furniture. Of course all that racket wakes up my parents, who open up their door and are swarmed by the 3 horny infected.
I then get to watch all the scene because our rooms share a wall window (it does in real life - my room used to be a small office, connected to my parent's bedroom) and I can see everything. There's going to be my mother fucked by the 2 students, while my father is fucked by my brother and some other variations. And they use their smartphones to further infect my parents.
So...this is the hard part. How should I end the story? I've got 3 main endings:
- me opening up the door and joining them of my own free will. Taking all 4 cocks and a very horny woman.
- Staying in my room and ending the story just like that.
- staying in my room and receiving a message from my friend saying I'll come and get me. What I don't know is that he's also infected, but the infection is changing, and that the infected don't loose much of their intelligence, just their inhibitions.
Of if anyone else has got a good ending or any other suggestion, please post. And thanks in advance!
As I said in my intro, I've been writing my sexual fantasies from some time now, but I usually have the same problem - I rarely finish them. I can write a couple of chapters and then move on to another one. This time I would like to try my hand at doing a complete one. But I would like some feedback on it, so here's the main idea.
The story will be in first-person because I usually love to get on the thick of it
I'm 19, living with my parents (mother is 47 and I'll be using the model Milena Velba as her "template", father is 48 - I imagine him being an older Peter North

I have my own small room, right next to my parent's, while my brother shares the bedroom with the 2 students (in real life we slept all 4 in one room, lol). Me and the students usually go to bed very late - I'm usually on my PC; the students stay on the living room on their laptops/seeing Tv/even studying! My parents and my brother go to sleep at 11PM, 12PM.
So during one of those nights, I'm talking to a friend on MSN/YahooMessenger and he says that there's something wrong happening all over the world. We check GoogleNews and there's reports that there's an infection going around. It's like 2am at no-one seems to know where it started.
The only thing that they know is that it transform people in a certain age range into sex-maniacs (so no children/elderly people are infected) who try to fuck everyone (once again, all in their age range but they don't care about family ties/if is a male/female).
As I'm starting to open my door to go downstairs and watch further developments on TV, I see my friend texting me, saying that there are now reports that TV broadcasts seem to be the source of the infection. Anyone that had a TV on gets infected (the idea is similar to the "Pulse" novel by Stephen King and the infection is like the Intersect on the 'Chuck' tv series - some seconds of millions of images flashing on the screen).
I see that information and at the same time I hear a commotion on the stairs. I peek out and see that the 2 students are coming up, to the floor bellow entering the room they share with my brother. I send a BRB to my friend and go check what's happening. I can hear lots of noise coming from the room so I slowly peek around the door - the rooms is in disarray with the only light coming from a lamp on the floor, the 2 guys are on my brother's bed (bed sheets all over the place, his t-shirt and boxers are all ripped up) and they are making him suck them, etc. (I'll write the rest of the sex in the story itself). And he seems to be enjoying the treatment
Of course like in all good gay/incest stories I can't resist and get excited when I see that. I've always been attracted to my brother (I'm bisexual in real life and in the story) and I just love to see him there. What I don't notice at first is that one of the guys has a smartphone on his hand and he's streaming some broadcast on it, pointing it to my brother. So after a while, when the sex stops, I see that they loose interest in him and start to wander across the room. He then gets up from the bed (ripped clothes, lots of cum on his body) and joins them.
I decide to go back into my room but when I back up, I make some noise and they all look at the direction of the door and start to move. I go up the stairs with them in pursuit and get to my room and lock it, then further block it with furniture. Of course all that racket wakes up my parents, who open up their door and are swarmed by the 3 horny infected.
I then get to watch all the scene because our rooms share a wall window (it does in real life - my room used to be a small office, connected to my parent's bedroom) and I can see everything. There's going to be my mother fucked by the 2 students, while my father is fucked by my brother and some other variations. And they use their smartphones to further infect my parents.
So...this is the hard part. How should I end the story? I've got 3 main endings:
- me opening up the door and joining them of my own free will. Taking all 4 cocks and a very horny woman.
- Staying in my room and ending the story just like that.
- staying in my room and receiving a message from my friend saying I'll come and get me. What I don't know is that he's also infected, but the infection is changing, and that the infected don't loose much of their intelligence, just their inhibitions.
Of if anyone else has got a good ending or any other suggestion, please post. And thanks in advance!
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