There's one little detail that I noticed that might could have been a little more humorous; ...He said he ran into the bathroom, and in an attempt to show contempt for their actions he began pouring a bottle of rubbing alcohol on his cock and balls. He fell to the floor, screaming in agony over the pain his action brought on..
Instead of 'attempt to show contempt...', perhaps; 'He said he was so disgusted to have been inside Eva, he ran to the bathroom to wash himself clean of her copious juices and just get the hell out of there as fast as possible. The first thing he saw on the counter was a big bottle of rubbing alcohol...he said that in the confusion of the moment, he made a snap decision that the alcohol would clean her mess off better than water—and he just doused his cock and balls with it. While rubbing it in, some of the alcohol got on his asshole and it took off there first...then everything down there started burning like a summer grass fire on the high plains!.
To top it off, both Eva and Melissa were now standing in the bathroom doorway laughing so hard their eyes were watering. Then, just as I was reaching for the water faucet to wash the liquid fire off my junk, Melissa yells, ""Get the fuck out of here! Right now or I'm going to call 9-1-1!"
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The story may be failing to connect because there is only that one moment of humor in the bathroom. It was 'cute', but I wouldn't say really enough to make a humorous story. I guess one option would be to enhance the humor? (perhaps, just as 'you' and Dwayne finish his version of the event, Eva comes home to find you both laughing. Finding out why, she then tells her and her sister's side of the story= more humor content???) There's Joni Mitchel's song Clouds; '...gotta leave 'em laughing as you go.'
As to what other category; Since the story ended on an upbeat and positive note with love found; I think it would also fit in Erotic Couplings. If you're going to move it, you might consider adding more to the happy relationship???
