Hmmm, what do you think...

[scrtplsrs]

about this Erotic Science Fiction story, set in another Universe.

http://english.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=194214


I have a single comment so far that perplexes me. "Not quite a nightmare, but very hard to read."


Now it could be because I did not italicize the dream portion of the story, to set it off, or it could be because I did not put a large bumper between the dream and the main story part.
Whatever the reason I would like to get other feedback on this to answer the questions,

Is it hard to read?

Is the theme of the story understandable?


Thank You
Scrtplsrs

 

[msboy8]

I R.V.C.ed your story. The theme was there, I think you used images more than just saying what happened. Keep writing!

 

[scrtplsrs]

I R.V.C.ed your story. The theme was there, I think you used images more than just saying what happened. Keep writing!

Thank You, maybe I should just stick to writing scripts. I've been told before that I "write visually,...that my works read as movies".



After thought:

There's not a place here for scripts is there? I don't think there is. Hmmm, maybe I'll see what I can do about that, as I can write scripts easier than stories.