Hispanic Lesbian Incest

[SEVERUSMAX]

I am also collaborating with another writer (who, you will find out in time, when I give her credit) on a story where two Hispanic girls, who are cousins, fall for each other. Unlike most of my stories, I think that I will end this one with a monogamous relationship. It's not something that I tend to do, but that will make it a challenge for me. I will just have to imagine that kind of jealousy, since I generally don't feel it.

 

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Are you looking for questions/comments/suggestions?

 

[SEVERUSMAX]

Are you looking for questions/comments/suggestions?

Any or all of the above. And, yes, I'm making the women pure lesbians, rather than bisexuals. They have ZERO interest in men.

 

[bisexplicit]

I think the story is good - aside from the monogamy part. I just can't ever see incest tales realistically working out as a monogamous, long term relationship.

 

[SEVERUSMAX]

I think the story is good - aside from the monogamy part. I just can't ever see incest tales realistically working out as a monogamous, long term relationship.

Interesting feedback. Admittedly, I've never done an incest story that involved monogamy (or too many other kinds of stories that involved monogamy, for that matter). You think that incestuous relationships are simply too volatile and they would each have to look for other girlfriends? Because I'm firmly decided that they are gay in this one. I normally prefer to make women bi in my stories, so I figured that simple lesbianism would be a refreshing twist. Is there just too much pressure on most people for them to continue with incest? This is the kind of feedback I'm interested in hearing. Honest opinions based on reason, and showing the logic behind them.

 

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For one, it would be a relationship that you'd have to keep hidden and secret. And it's hard to have a long term relationship like that.

It could be interesting if you had one of the characters as faithful, and committed, and the other, although attempting to be faithful/committed, find the secret relationship too difficult. She could end up cheating, and thus, the relationship is forced to end.

 

[SEVERUSMAX]

For one, it would be a relationship that you'd have to keep hidden and secret. And it's hard to have a long term relationship like that.

It could be interesting if you had one of the characters as faithful, and committed, and the other, although attempting to be faithful/committed, find the secret relationship too difficult. She could end up cheating, and thus, the relationship is forced to end.

That could be a pressure, and one possible ending is a not so good one, with them breaking up due to one partner's infidelity. Of course, another possibility is that they move to Massachusetts and get married (I think that might be legal now, since they are only cousins instead of sisters). Being in a new state, they might have less pressure on them to hide it. The dark, sad ending has some promise. After all, it would be a change from my usual, karmic, all things turn out well in the end approach. Real life often has such tragic events, and while I don't have to follow reality completely, a dose of harsh realism might be a good change.

 

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Darker stories are sometimes harder on lit, since it is masturbation material. So, you'll have to decide which way you want to go.

 

[SEVERUSMAX]

Darker stories are sometimes harder on lit, since it is masturbation material. So, you'll have to decide which way you want to go.

True. Interesting and possibly helpful feedback. Thanks.