His Kiss: A true story

[SweetLady85]

As we lay there, face to face, I watch the lines of his nose. In my mind, I pace around thinking of the kiss that never happened. Oh how I could just hold him and kiss him so, but I didn't want to move too fast. Then my eyes grow heavy. He tells me to stay awake. I ask him what's on his mind. I hear so many words that soon fade when suddenly, I feel a gentle kiss on my neck. I thought maybe he was just trying to tickle my neck like he tickled my legs moments ago, but the kisses grow more passionate, and stronger by the second. Internally, I'm set free on cloud nine. I just want to kiss his lips so badly, but I take my time. And kiss the little freckles upon his cheek, then suddenly, the kiss. So passionately he grabs me and I am lost inside his world. So passionate that one month later all I can think of is his kiss. If only I could have another moment...

 

[Black Tulip]

Uh, I wouldn't call this a story. It's more of a single scene.

Not bad, but I found it confusing that you mixed past and present tense.

 

[Kain__Thornn]

As we lay there, face to face, I watch the lines of his nose. In my mind, I pace around thinking of the kiss that never happened. Oh how I could just hold him and kiss him so, but I didn't want to move too fast. Then my eyes grow heavy. He tells me to stay awake. I ask him what's on his mind. I hear so many words that soon fade when suddenly, I feel a gentle kiss on my neck. I thought maybe he was just trying to tickle my neck like he tickled my legs moments ago, but the kisses grow more passionate, and stronger by the second. Internally, I'm set free on cloud nine. I just want to kiss his lips so badly, but I take my time. And kiss the little freckles upon his cheek, then suddenly, the kiss. So passionately he grabs me and I am lost inside his world. So passionate that one month later all I can think of is his kiss. If only I could have another moment...

I like this kind of writing, well written! You should come into GB and look up the thread called "Kiss Me"...