Andrea, I've never been interested in my mom sexually, but I thought "Hidden Fun" was very exciting. English isn't the easiest language in the world to master, and I congratulate you for trying. Keep at it, and you'll get better.
On your way, though, better watch some of those words that might slip in without your knowing it! I'm thinking of "I began to suck and kick her breast." I don't THINK that's what you meant to say!
First, I doubt that anyone is limber enough to suck and kick the same thing at the same time. Second, I doubt the mom would have enjoyed things nearly as much.
Anyway, it was a nice effort. Keep on practicing your writing. Just make sure you have your male characters go to bed barefoot!
On your way, though, better watch some of those words that might slip in without your knowing it! I'm thinking of "I began to suck and kick her breast." I don't THINK that's what you meant to say!
Anyway, it was a nice effort. Keep on practicing your writing. Just make sure you have your male characters go to bed barefoot!
