Hey Authors and Readers!

I think it would be ok to put it in one story.If there is a lot of dialog in it,you could interweave it together.

It would help us to decide if we had some sense of the content of the story.

Hope that helps alittle.
 
Thank you Mortto! (I'm in the mood to work on this now so I've just been waiting for anyone to post!) :)

The story doesn't have that much dialogue. And the thing that worries me if I intertwine it, is losing the reader. I'm afraid the reader is just going to get confused and not know who's point of view it is if I flop back and forth.

A brief description of the plot is this: man brings woman to orgasm while they are in the living room of her parents house.

K
 
Yea I can see where there wouldn't be much dialogue in it,being that there in the parents house.And probably don't want to get caught.

No screaming allowed,just creaming.(LOL)
 
It's a good technique...

CD-able and I wrote a novella (Rue du 8 Mai 1948) using a similar technique as well as a few short stories. The stories were written separately and then edited together into one story. Lots of cut and paste. The novella went through several test readers and we responded to the criticisms in the following ways...

We tried to limit repeating the story unless the perspective was crucial to the plot. For example we visited the Jardin des Tuillieries together, but the descriptions were different. This reduced the story length by about 20% and increased the readability.

We added a third narrator, in this case a third lover although it could be an "omnipotent narrator" to bridge the gaps and give the necessary details to the story.

Finally, we began each person's dialogue or narrative with their name so it was clear who was speaking. You could use symbols to show a break in the story and, in hindsight, we might have chosen to do this way (the story's already been published as is so it's a moot point).

Personally, I choose to keep these stories together because when it's done well I think it's very entertaining. Good luck with it.
 
read some good ones..started reading some got lost.

went away from some calling here kitty kitty!! hey! where's the beef.?

you sound like you will do o.k. to me! i wait with lusting eyes.
 
He said...She said...

I have read a few of this style of view point story over the years, out of the formats that I have seen used the two types I found easiest to use as a reader are described below.

Intermingling paragraphs from each point of view taking turns paragraph by paragraph, this allows the reader to pick one or the other viewpoints and to read the work as a singularity, or the whole story to be read as one.

The other style I liked, split the page vertically and to use the vertical spacing to highlight the different views of the same instants


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I think it would be best in one story with pragraph counter point view paragraph through out. him /her style. just my 2 cents
 
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