HELP Please

[ToryonegaoWolf]

I am trying to write a story about an incubus who invisably watches a virgin masturbate in a bathtub then when she goes to bed and falls asleep he enters her dream and fucks her while she is asleep and in the dream too. can anyone help me flesh out my story? maybe be a co-author or just give me ideas?

 

[msboy8]

I am trying to write a story about an incubus who invisably watches a virgin masturbate in a bathtub then when she goes to bed and falls asleep he enters her dream and fucks her while she is asleep and in the dream too. can anyone help me flesh out my story? maybe be a co-author or just give me ideas?

First idea, get an editor/proofreader. It sounds like you've got a great Idea.

What is the virgin thinking about when she masterbates?

Does she get pregnant? lascivious male demon said to possess mortal women as they sleep and to be responsible for the birth of demons, witches, and deformed children.

Read more mythology for background on the incubus.

Does he have a name?

Will he see her again?

Good luck with your story.

 

[ToryonegaoWolf]

Innocent Virgin

Her age doesn't ever really get mensioned in the story but she has a child-like innocence, and so one day she is horny and doesn't understand what the feeling is. So while she is in the bath tub she washes her breasts and it feels better than it ever has before so she keeps rubbing them and ect. ..... that kind of thing is what I was thinking. But the feeling behind the story isn't really of force, although there is some manipulation, and probably a spell or mind control ability involved, it is of the incubus being irresistably drawn to her innocence and her arrousal and her beauty, and he has to have her. And I don't think I will go as far as her getting pregnant, at least not at first , she needs a few repeat performances you know. I am thinking of taking it in a D/s direction, where eventually she becomes His treasured one. I haven't done much on the story other than have the concept thought out. That is why I tought someone might co-write it with me. And yes the Incubus has a name, it is Trisstan.

 

[BedtimeStories]

Her age doesn't ever really get mensioned in the story but she has a child-like innocence, and so one day she is horny and doesn't understand what the feeling is.

A child-like innocence where she doesn't understand what the feeling is? That may be boarderline on not getting published. Don't know for sure.

 

[doormouse]

I agree with Bedtime-Stories. You really need to mention her age if you're going to refer to 'childlike'... I'd avoid that word if I were you.

Maybe, her unblemished innocence?

 

[ToryonegaoWolf]

Postable

I am thinking it will go something like......

She was so tired after a hard day at College that she decided to take a bath.... (to imply her being over 18)

without understanding it, she was feeling horny for the first time in her life... (a late bloomer type of thing)

she washed her body, as she always had, using a washcloth to spread the soap over her skin. but tonight for some reason unknown to her, her skin seemed much more sensitive. and as she washed her breasts it felt so good, so that even not understanding why, she had to keep rubbing the rough cloth over her puckered nipples......


so although she has a childlike innocence it will be implied that she is an adult (at least 18).

 

[Illiterate Piff]

fuck this kiddie porn shit

it's not piff approved

 

[Mr. Marcus]

Spam deleted

 

[msboy8]

fuck this kiddie porn shit

it's not piff approved

I'm very tired, so excuse me if I get out of line. What the fuck are you talking about, you ignorant Piff? That is one great thing about Literotica. They don't allow such on their site.

On other sites the 12 year olds act like 18 year olds! Please do not get upset because you think this 18 year old is acting younger. Why don't you stay on the General Board! 'Nuff said.

 

[Illiterate Piff]

I'm very tired, so excuse me if I get out of line. What the fuck are you talking about, you ignorant Piff? That is one great thing about Literotica. They don't allow such on their site.

On other sites the 12 year olds act like 18 year olds! Please do not get upset because you think this 18 year old is acting younger. Why don't you stay on the General Board! 'Nuff said.

SHUT YOUR GAY ASS UP

 

[snooper]

SHUT YOUR GAY ASS UP

Congratulations. Only five postings to get on my ignore list. That is certainly a record.

 

[BedtimeStories]

At least his screen name is truth in advertising.

By the way, is "harassment" allowed in a story idea thread? Obviously he is not contributing to the story...

 

[Sean Renaud]

I'll help toss you some ideas

First you can get away with some pretty borderline stuff. As long as it can be believed that she is 18 you should get away with it just fine. I would mention an age just to be on the safe side but if you read my The Tale of Patricia Royson, By Sean Renaud you can tell that I made her very emotionally immature. Over protective parents so she was 20 something but she acted 12. Anyway I would definitely agree that more research on your part might be needed if you want to do a series. The masturbaution scene is going to be important so do it well. There is a lot of sex on this site. You want to be special you need to find a way to stand out.

Sean Renaud

 

[BedtimeStories]

So, it's a turn on for you men when an "adult" acts like she's only 12 and is mentally challenged??

 

[Akito01]

There's a way to make this work without delving into the 'child-like' issue at all. Given that the character is, say, twenty, it isn't outrageous to suggest that she is a virgin and comes from a very religious background; thus providing a reason for the demon's interest, since she is pure and virtuous, but is giving in to a moment of self abuse. It's not that she doesn't know what she's doing when she masturbates, but she does feel shame because of her upbringing.

 

[ToryonegaoWolf]

Feeling Misunderstood

So, it's a turn on for you men when an "adult" acts like she's only 12 and is mentally challenged??

*By the way I am a female*
Certainly not. I just thought of this character as very innocent and ignorant about her body as regards to sexual things. I am not suggesting she is mentally challenged, rather that she was very overprotected and not allowed to know about anything her parents felt she shouldn't know. She is in her early twentys in my mind, but i find if i don't mension a specific age, and i don't get too descriptive about what the characters look like, it is easier for the readers to imagine the characters as what they find more stimulating rather than force them to imagine the characters as i see them. i find writing this way makes it so that one person can read my story several times and each time come away with something new.

 

[handlebars69]

I think you can make the whole thing work without the "childlike" thing. she move intoa new apartment(where she picks up the incubus), while attending college, being busy with unpacking school and work she dosent have time to masturbate and when she finally does is when the incubus decides to have her.

 

[ToryonegaoWolf]

Let's Be Clear

Ok just to clarify a little, the best advice I have ever gotten on writting is "write what you know, and it will be more believable". This Virgin maiden's childlike innocence and naivete, are based on my own childlike innocence and naivete, and although I am not a virgin (thank the goddess), the character is based on me but then I change some characteristics, and I change the way she looks, and I have the main character in this story. And BTW, I have started this story as a rp on the sexual role play board. Right now I am still casting the characters, but hopefully i can use some of the dialog and actions from the rp in the story.

 

[Never]

Shocking as it may be, I knew a few girls in college who were both childlike and uninformed about sex.

Besides, I'm I the only one who thinks it's strange that 'Are you there God? It's me, Margaret' could never be placed on Lit? I can understand the potential for abuse but let's give the author a break. The only way you can write about someone masturbating for the first time on Lit is if they're 18 or over. This doesn't mean that someone is a bad author because they have 'childlike innocence' in adult. It means they're realistic.